自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is direct and includes relevant details about how you used your bike and why you enjoyed it. To make it more natural and concise, avoid repeating “when I was a child” after “used to,” and consider splitting the long second sentence into two. You could also use a more precise phrase such as “ride around the local parks.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school and rode around the local parks with my friends in the afternoons. I loved the freedom it gave me, and it also helped me stay active.

建议: You answer the question clearly and give relevant reasons, but add a comma after “Yes” and avoid using “usually” when “many young people” already describes a general habit. Correct “during in the afternoon” to “in the afternoon,” and replace “students in the row on the road with bikes” with a natural description, such as “students riding in lines along the road.”

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many young people ride them to school because they are affordable, convenient, and easy to park. In the afternoon, you can often see groups of students cycling home along the roads.

× For example, during in the afternoon, we can easily see the students in the row on the road with bikes.

✓ For example, in the afternoon, we can easily see students riding in a row along the road.

The phrase during in the afternoon incorrectly combines two time prepositions; use either during the afternoon or in the afternoon. In the row is also unnatural here; use in a row to describe students riding one behind another. Along the road is more appropriate for describing their movement. Check that you use only one preposition for a time expression and choose prepositions that clearly express location or movement.