自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再补充一个清晰、具体的细节。原回答中的“both my mother there”“a chicken a bite”等表达难以理解；注意使用正确的过去时，例如用“gave”而不是“gives”，并说“on my birthday”而不是“in my birthday party”。建议控制在两三句内。

示例: Yes, I did. My mother gave me my first bike as a birthday present when I was about seven. I was really excited and rode it around our neighborhood every weekend.

建议: 开头要直接回答“是”或“不是”，并明确说明自行车为什么受欢迎。可以提到价格便宜、方便通勤，以及学生骑车上学等具体例子。注意使用比较级“cheaper”，避免不完整或难以理解的表达；用“Also”或“for example”连接补充信息。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they’re cheaper and more convenient than cars for short journeys. For example, many students ride their bikes to school, and some adults use them to get around their neighborhoods.

× Definitely I remember my first bike was both my mother there when I was when I were a child.

✓ Definitely, I remember that my first bike was bought by my mother when I was a child.

“was both my mother there”无法构成清晰、完整的句子结构；根据上下文，可改为被动结构“was bought by my mother”。此外，“when I was when...”重复了时间从句，应只保留一次。

× Definitely I remember my first bike was both my mother there when I was when I were a child.

✓ Definitely, I remember that my first bike was bought by my mother when I was a child.

主语是第一人称“I”，描述过去的状态时应使用“was”，不能使用“were”。

× She gives a chicken a bite for me in my birthday party.

✓ She gave a chicken a bite for me at my birthday party.

这句话讲的是过去发生的事，动词应使用过去式。“give”的过去式是“gave”。

× She gives a chicken a bite for me in my birthday party.

✓ She gave a chicken a bite for me at my birthday party.

表示在生日派对这个活动中，通常用“at a birthday party”，不使用“in a birthday party”。

× Most ideas I think fast are popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country.

原句中“Most ideas”和“fast”与句子的其他部分无法组成清楚、自然的结构。根据上下文，表达“我认为自行车在我的国家很受欢迎”时，可以说“I think bikes are popular in my country”。

× The bike is more cheap and convenient. in our daily life.

✓ The bike is cheaper and more convenient in our daily life.

“Cheap”的比较级是“cheaper”，不能说“more cheap”。比较级形式应为“cheaper and more convenient”。

× The bike is more cheap and convenient. in our daily life.

✓ The bike is cheaper and more convenient in our daily life.

“In our daily life”是介词短语，不能单独作为一个句子。应将它连接到前面的完整句子中，并且句中间不应另起一个句子。