自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then add one or two relevant details. Avoid repeating “I had,” and say “I was six or seven years old,” not “I was a six years old.” Keep the tense consistent by describing how you felt at the time in the past. You could also make the detail more specific by mentioning where you rode your bike.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was about six or seven when I learned to ride it. I loved cycling to nearby places on my own because it made me feel independent.

建议: This is a clear, well-supported answer with relevant examples. To sound more natural and concise, consider replacing “amateur athletes” with a more everyday group, such as “people who exercise,” and avoid repeating the idea of exercise in the final clause. You could add a brief detail about where people cycle.

示例: Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country. Many people ride bikes to commute or keep fit, while families often cycle together at weekends. You can see them on local roads and cycle paths, especially in parks.

× Maybe I was a six years old or seven years old.

✓ Maybe I was six or seven years old.

Do not use the article a before an age expressed with a number and years old. Say I was six years old, not I was a six years old.

× That's really exciting when you go somewhere alone and at that time you feel independent.

✓ That was really exciting when I went somewhere alone, and at that time I felt independent.

The student is describing a childhood experience that happened in the past, so the verbs should be in the past tense: was, went, and felt. Using I also keeps the description consistent with the student's personal experience.