自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你直接回答了问题，也用一次摔车的经历补充细节，这是不错的内容。但整句缺少停顿，建议拆成两句；讲过去的经历时要用过去式，如“took”，并说“rode my bike in the park”而不是“take a bike in the park”。通常说“broke my arm”，而不是“broke my arms”。

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was a child, and I used to ride it in the park near my home. Once, I fell off and broke my arm, so I became much more careful after that.

建议: 你表达了明确观点，但“no longer popular than before”不符合这里的比较表达，可改为“less popular than they used to be”。注意名词单复数，并将“the electric replace bike”改为“electric bikes have replaced traditional bicycles”。“with the development with society”也不自然，可说“as technology has developed”。建议补充一个具体原因或例子，让回答更完整。

示例: I think traditional bikes are less popular than they used to be. As technology has developed, many people have switched to electric bikes because they are faster and require less effort. However, bicycles are still common in parks and among people who cycle for exercise.

× Yeah, I had a bike when I was a little boy I clearly remember once I take a bike in the park, then I broke my arms.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a little boy. I clearly remember that once I took my bike to the park, I broke my arms.

这段话讲的是小时候发生的事情，应用一般过去时。原句中的“take”应改为过去式“took”。讲过去经历时，要注意把相关动作的动词也保持在过去时。

× Yeah, I had a bike when I was a little boy I clearly remember once I take a bike in the park, then I broke my arms.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a little boy. I clearly remember that once I took my bike to the park, I broke my arms.

原句把多个完整意思直接连在一起，缺少恰当的断句，导致句子结构不清楚。可以在“boy”后用句号分开，并用“that”引出“我清楚地记得”的内容。表达“骑车去公园”时，可以说“take my bike to the park”。

× Well, personally, I think bike is no longer popular than before, you know, with the development with society, the electric replace bike.

✓ Well, personally, I think bikes are no longer as popular as before. You know, with the development of society, electric bikes replace regular bikes.

这里是在泛指自行车，通常用复数“bikes”，而不是单数“bike”。同样，“electric”后需要补上名词“bikes”；泛指电动自行车时用“electric bikes”。表达一般情况时，名词单复数要与句意一致。

× Well, personally, I think bike is no longer popular than before, you know, with the development with society, the electric replace bike.

✓ Well, personally, I think bikes are no longer as popular as before. You know, with the development of society, electric bikes replace regular bikes.

“no longer popular than before”中的比较结构不正确。表达“没有以前那么受欢迎”应使用“not/no longer as + 形容词原级 + as”，因此应说“no longer as popular as before”。

× Well, personally, I think bike is no longer popular than before, you know, with the development with society, the electric replace bike.

✓ Well, personally, I think bikes are no longer as popular as before. You know, with the development of society, electric bikes replace regular bikes.

固定搭配是“the development of society”，表示“社会的发展”；这里应使用“of”，而不是第二个“with”。建议记住名词“development”后常用“of”引出发展的对象。