自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答切题，也提供了买车的原因和颜色等细节，但语法错误较多，影响表达清晰度。可以直接先回答“有”，再说明当时很多孩子在公园骑车，因此妈妈在你七岁时给你买了一辆黑色自行车。注意使用过去时：用“there were many children”，而不是“was so a lot of children”；用“rode bikes”，而不是“ride bike”；描述过去年龄时用“when I was seven”，而不是“when I'm seven”。

示例: Yes, I did. When I was seven, many children in my neighborhood rode their bikes in the park, so my mom bought me a black bike. I loved riding it there with my friends.

建议: 你表达了自行车现在更受欢迎的观点，也尝试对比过去和现在，但过去部分与问题的联系不够清楚，且时态和句型错误较多。建议开头直接回答“Yes, they are”，再用“compared with ten years ago”引出对比，并说明人们现在更重视健康，所以骑车的人变多。注意说“cycling is popular”或“bikes are popular”，不要说“by bike are popular”；过去的情况用过去时，避免“people are work”。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Compared with ten years ago, more people are choosing to cycle because they care more about their health. Cycling is also a convenient way to get around, especially for short trips.

× Of course, that time I was so a lot of children ride bike in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I'm seven years old.

✓ Of course. At that time, a lot of children rode bikes in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I was seven years old.

表示“在那个时候”通常说“at that time”，不能直接说“that time”。可以记住这个固定搭配：“at that time”。

× Of course, that time I was so a lot of children ride bike in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I'm seven years old.

✓ Of course. At that time, a lot of children rode bikes in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I was seven years old.

“I was so a lot of children ride...”的结构不完整且成分混乱。应直接以“a lot of children”作主语，组成“主语 + 谓语 + 其他成分”的完整句子。

× Of course, that time I was so a lot of children ride bike in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I'm seven years old.

✓ Of course. At that time, a lot of children rode bikes in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I was seven years old.

这里说的是很多孩子骑自行车，泛指自行车时应使用复数“bikes”，而不是单数“bike”。可数名词前也要根据数量使用合适的单复数形式。

× Of course, that time I was so a lot of children ride bike in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I'm seven years old.

✓ Of course. At that time, a lot of children rode bikes in the park, so my mom bought a black bike for me when I was seven years old.

句子描述的是童年时发生的事情，应该使用过去时。因此，“ride”改为“rode”，“I'm”改为“I was”。讲述过去经历时，要保持相关动词的时态一致。

× Before 10 years ago that time people think money is very important, so many people are work hard more and more.

✓ Ten years ago, people thought money was very important, so many people worked harder and harder.

“Before 10 years ago that time”表达重复且结构不自然。直接说“Ten years ago”即可。“ago”已经表示“以前”，不需要再加“before”或“that time”。

× Before 10 years ago that time people think money is very important, so many people are work hard more and more.

✓ Ten years ago, people thought money was very important, so many people worked harder and harder.

“Ten years ago”表示过去，因此应使用过去时：“think”改为“thought”，“is”改为“was”，“are work”改为“worked”。描述过去的情况时，要注意整句的时态一致。

× Before 10 years ago that time people think money is very important, so many people are work hard more and more.

✓ Ten years ago, people thought money was very important, so many people worked harder and harder.

“hard more and more”不是正确的比较表达。表示“越来越努力”时，可以说“harder and harder”。注意副词“hard”的比较级是“harder”。

× But now people are focused on health, so by bike are popular in my country.

✓ But now people are focused on health, so bikes are popular in my country.

“by bike”表示“骑自行车这种方式”，不能在这里充当“are popular”的主语。应使用“bikes”作主语，构成“bikes are popular”。