自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlıyorsunuz ancak cevap çok kısa kalıyor. Çocukken bisikletinizle ne yaptığınızı veya bisikletinizle ilgili kısa bir anınızı ekleyerek cevabınızı 2–3 cümleye genişletin.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike, and I often rode it around my neighbourhood with my friends.

建议: Cevabınızın ana fikri anlaşılmakta zorlanıyor; dolgu sesleri ve tekrarlar akıcılığı azaltıyor. Önce bisikletlerin popüler olup olmadığını net biçimde söyleyin. Ardından Türkiye’de bisiklet yollarının durumu gibi belirli bir neden verin ve gençler ya da yetişkinler arasında kullanımına kısa bir örnek ekleyin. “Bike lanes need to be improved” ifadesini kullanabilirsiniz.

示例: Bikes are not very popular in Turkey, mainly because there aren’t enough safe bike lanes in many cities. However, some teenagers and adults use them for exercise or short trips.

× the bike rolls need need to be more improved

✓ The bike roads need to be improved.

More improved is an awkward comparative form here. Use improved; the sentence does not need more before it. Also, remove the repeated words need need.

× need to need to be more improvement

✓ They need to be improved.

After be in this passive construction, use the past participle improved, not the noun improvement. Avoid repeating need to.

× to use people

✓ for people to use them

The original phrase has an unclear structure and makes people sound like the object being used. For people to use them clearly expresses that people use the bike roads.

× but some populations, in the teenagers and middle age

✓ However, bikes are popular among some teenagers and middle-aged people.

The original phrase is a fragment because it has no main verb. Add a subject and verb to make a complete clause. Use among to identify the groups, and middle-aged people rather than middle age when describing people.