自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly in the past tense, since the question is about your childhood. Use the natural phrase “a small bike with two training wheels” rather than “a toy bike” if that is what you mean. Correct “this is bike” to “this bike,” and replace “I like the enjoying bike ride” with “I really enjoyed riding it.” Add one specific memory if you can.

示例: Yes, I had a small bike with two training wheels when I was a child. I rode it around my neighborhood quite often because it helped me learn to balance. I especially enjoyed riding it with my friends after school.

建议: Start with a clear answer, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Avoid repeated or unclear phrases like “my most” and “all of choices.” Explain your idea in a logical way: say who rides bikes and why, then give a relevant example. Use “interested in bikes,” not “interesting about the bike,” and use linking words such as “for example” or “because.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. Many young people become interested in them after seeing their favorite characters or celebrities riding motorcycles in films. Also, bicycles are a convenient and affordable way to get around.

× Yes, I have a bike which is considered to be a toy bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that was considered a toy bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past-tense verb had rather than the present-tense have. Was also keeps the description in the past.

× I used to ride this is bike a lot but supported 2 small wheel on the rear part of it.

✓ I used to ride this bike a lot, but it had two small wheels at the back.

This is bike is not a grammatical phrase; use this bike. The clause after but also needs a subject and a correctly formed verb, so say it had. Make sure each clause has a clear subject and verb.

× I used to ride this is bike a lot but supported 2 small wheel on the rear part of it.

✓ I used to ride this bike a lot, but it had two small wheels at the back.

Because the number is two, the noun must be plural: wheels, not wheel. Use the plural form after numbers greater than one.

× I like the enjoying bike ride very much in my childhood.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bike very much during my childhood.

The sentence describes a childhood experience, so use the past-tense verb enjoyed rather than the present-tense like.

× I like the enjoying bike ride very much in my childhood.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bike very much during my childhood.

The verb enjoy is followed by a gerund, or verb ending in -ing. Say enjoyed riding my bike, not the enjoying bike ride. Use enjoy plus an -ing verb when describing the activity.

× Yes, my most, yes, my car popular and all of choices among all of choices in our country because the children in our country, they watch movies and they they are watching movies and follow their hero and their hero of riding a bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are among the most popular choices in our country because children watch movies and follow heroes who ride bikes.

The original contains incomplete and repeated phrases, so its clauses do not form a clear grammatical sentence. Use a complete subject and verb, remove repetition, and connect the reason with because. A relative clause such as who ride bikes clearly describes the heroes.

× So they are very interesting about the bike in the childhood.

✓ So they are very interested in bikes during childhood.

Interested describes how people feel; interesting describes something that causes interest. Use interested when describing the children’s feelings.

× So they are very interesting about the bike in the childhood.

✓ So they are very interested in bikes during childhood.

The adjective interested is followed by in, not about. Use during childhood to refer naturally to the period of being a child.