自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, 관사와 표현을 다듬어야 합니다. ‘when I was child’는 ‘when I was a child’, ‘Me and my dad’는 ‘My dad and I’가 자연스럽습니다. ‘bike’와 ‘ride’를 반복하기보다 어떤 자전거를 탔는지, 아버지가 어떻게 도와주셨는지 구체적으로 설명하고, 기억에 남는 이유까지 간결하게 덧붙여 보세요.

示例: Yes, I had a small blue bike when I was a child. My dad and I used to ride together in the park, and he taught me how to balance. I still remember how proud I felt when I rode on my own for the first time.

建议: ‘Sure’ 뒤에 자전거가 인기 있는 이유를 바로 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 ‘ride a bike’가 반복되고, ‘There’s very there are very lot of bike roads’는 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. ‘There are a lot of bike paths’라고 고치고, 자전거 도로가 많은 도시나 성인들의 이용 사례처럼 구체적인 근거를 하나 추가하세요.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among children and people who enjoy exercising. Many cities have dedicated bike paths, so it’s convenient to ride safely. People also use bikes for short trips or weekend rides.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child needs an article. Use a before child in this expression: a child.

× Me and my dad used to go out to ride a bike and my dad taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ My dad and I used to go out to ride a bike, and my dad taught me how to ride a bike.

Me is an object pronoun, but it is part of the subject of the sentence. Use the subject pronoun I. When naming yourself and another person as the subject, the standard order is the other person first: My dad and I.

× It was very memorable time so I remember it.

✓ It was a very memorable time, so I remember it.

Time is a singular countable noun here, so it needs the article a. The adjective memorable comes after the article and before the noun.

× There's very there are very lot of bike roads.

✓ There are a lot of bike roads.

Use there are with the plural noun roads. The original sentence mixes there is and there are, so use only one correct there-be construction.

× There's very there are very lot of bike roads.

✓ There are a lot of bike roads.

Use a lot of to express a large number. Very cannot directly modify lot in this expression; very can instead modify many, as in very many bike roads.