自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and clarify who bought you the bike; “my partner” may not fit a childhood memory, so use the correct person, such as “my parents.” Correct the grammar in “I was really curious” and explain where you rode the bike. Avoid repeating “bike” or adding unclear phrases.

示例: Yes, I had a small pink bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and I was excited to learn how to ride it. I often rode it around my neighborhood.

建议: Give a clear answer first, then explain where bikes are especially popular and why. Avoid repeating words and incomplete phrases. Use the natural expression “ride their bikes to school” rather than “use the bicycle to move to their school.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in the countryside. Many high school students ride them to school because they are affordable and convenient. In larger cities, however, people may use public transport more often.

× I had a small bike with my favorite color pink my partner bought it for me and I remember that I really curious that I used to ride a bike around a bike.

✓ I had a small bike in my favorite color, pink. My partner bought it for me, and I remember that I was really curious about riding it around.

The clause I really curious is missing a verb. Add was before the adjective curious. Also, curious about is the standard structure when describing interest in an activity. The final phrase around a bike is unclear, so name the place you rode, if you remember it.

× I had a small bike with my favorite color pink my partner bought it for me and I remember that I really curious that I used to ride a bike around a bike.

✓ I had a small bike in my favorite color, pink. My partner bought it for me, and I remember that I was really curious about riding it around.

With my favorite color pink is not the natural way to describe the bike’s color. Use in my favorite color, pink, or simply say a small pink bike.

× Oh, yes, I do, but similar but it's more it more popular in the countryside because many young people in high school or secondary school they they use the student use the bicycle to move to their school

✓ Oh, yes, I do. Bikes are more popular in the countryside because many young people in high school or secondary school use bicycles to get to school.

The subject bikes is plural, so use the plural verb are rather than it is. Match the verb to the plural subject when you discuss bikes in general.

× Oh, yes, I do, but similar but it's more it more popular in the countryside because many young people in high school or secondary school they they use the student use the bicycle to move to their school

✓ Oh, yes, I do. Bikes are more popular in the countryside because many young people in high school or secondary school use bicycles to get to school.

The sentence contains repeated words and an extra subject: many young people ... they. It also includes the incomplete phrase the student use. Use one clear subject and verb, and remove repetitions. To get to school is a more natural way to express travelling to school.