自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly, then clarify the timeline: you did not have a bike at first, but your mother later gave you one. Use the past tense (“didn’t have,” “gave”), include articles (“a bike,” “a child”), and say “I liked it very much” rather than “I like that bicycle too much.” The explanation about being a girl is not necessary and may sound unnatural; focus on the gift and what you liked about it.

示例: I didn’t have a bike when I was very young, but my mother later gave me a beautiful pink bicycle. I loved it because it was my first bike, and I rode it whenever I had the chance.

建议: Your opening answers the question, but the rest of the response is difficult to follow. Explain briefly why bikes are popular, then add your personal example. Use natural phrases such as “ride with my husband,” “go grocery shopping,” and “enjoy the weather.” Check subject–verb agreement (“he goes”) and avoid repetitions such as “and and” and “enjoy” twice.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to get around. I sometimes ride with my husband when we go grocery shopping, and I enjoy being outdoors and seeing the shops along the way.

× I do not have bike when I was child because I am girl.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was a girl.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the verbs should be in the past tense: did not have and was. Use was rather than am to describe the student's past situation.

× I do not have bike when I was child because I am girl.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was a girl.

Singular countable nouns such as bike, child, and girl generally need an article. Use a before each noun here.

× So my mother give me a beautiful bicycle in pink colours.

✓ So my mother gave me a beautiful bicycle in pink.

The sentence describes something that happened during the student's childhood, so give should be in the past tense: gave.

× So my mother give me a beautiful bicycle in pink colours.

✓ So my mother gave me a beautiful bicycle in pink.

In pink colours is not the natural prepositional phrase for describing the bicycle's color. Use in pink, or say a pink bicycle.

× I like that bicycle too much.

✓ I liked that bicycle very much.

The student is talking about a bicycle from childhood, so the past tense liked is appropriate.

× I like that bicycle too much.

✓ I liked that bicycle very much.

Too much usually means more than is desirable. To say that the student liked the bicycle a lot, use very much.

× I also like very sitting in my bike with my husbands when he go for shopping or you know go for grocery.

✓ I also really like sitting on my bike with my husband when he goes shopping or, you know, goes to buy groceries.

Very is not placed naturally before like in this sentence. Use really before like, or use very much after the verb phrase.

× I also like very sitting in my bike with my husbands when he go for shopping or you know go for grocery.

✓ I also really like sitting on my bike with my husband when he goes shopping or, you know, goes to buy groceries.

People sit on a bike, not in a bike. Use the preposition on for a bicycle.

× I also like very sitting in my bike with my husbands when he go for shopping or you know go for grocery.

✓ I also really like sitting on my bike with my husband when he goes shopping or, you know, goes to buy groceries.

The sentence refers to one husband, as shown by he. Use the singular noun husband rather than the plural husbands.

× I also like very sitting in my bike with my husbands when he go for shopping or you know go for grocery.

✓ I also really like sitting on my bike with my husband when he goes shopping or, you know, goes to buy groceries.

The subject he is third-person singular, so the present-tense verb needs the ending -s: goes.

× Then I sit in his back and and enjoy the weather and enjoy different stores.

✓ Then I sit on the back of his bike and enjoy the weather and enjoy different stores.

In his back would mean inside his back. To describe sitting at the rear of the bicycle, use on the back of his bike.

× Then I sit in his back and and enjoy the weather and enjoy different stores.

✓ Then I sit on the back of his bike and enjoy the weather and enjoy different stores.

The conjunction and is repeated. Use it only once to connect the actions.