自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答小时候有没有自行车，再说明是谁教你骑、学习过程或骑车的感受。注意删除重复的“I learned”，并将“by with”改为“with”。“I am fond of writing”与自行车话题无关，可能是想说“我越来越喜欢骑车”；请检查词义。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it, and I gradually became more confident. I really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood.

建议: 回答切题，也提供了健康和环保两方面的理由。修改“practice our physical physically”为“improve our fitness”，并将“reduce carbon production”换成更自然的“reduce carbon emissions”。“We can build a better world”较笼统，可以补充具体场景，例如城市短途出行或共享单车。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China, especially for short trips around the city. Cycling is a convenient way to improve our fitness, and it also helps reduce carbon emissions. Many people use shared bikes to get to work or connect to public transport.

× Yes, I got a bike when I was a child and I learned I learned it by with my father's help gradually, I am fond of writing more and more and I'm good at it now.

✓ Yes, I got a bike when I was a child, and I gradually learned to ride it with my father's help. I am fond of writing more and more, and I'm good at it now.

“by with”把两个介词错误地连用在一起。表达“在父亲的帮助下”时，用“with my father's help”即可，不需要加“by”。另外，“learn to ride a bike”比“learn a bike”更清楚地表达“学会骑自行车”。

× Yes, I got a bike when I was a child and I learned I learned it by with my father's help gradually, I am fond of writing more and more and I'm good at it now.

✓ Yes, I got a bike when I was a child, and I gradually learned to ride it with my father's help. I am fond of writing more and more, and I'm good at it now.

原句用逗号直接连接了两个可以独立成句的内容，造成逗号拼接；“I learned”也重复了一次。可用句号分开完整句子，并删除重复内容。表达学习骑车时，可以说“learned to ride it”。

× Riding bikes can not only practice our physical physically but also can reduce carbon production and protect the environment.

✓ Riding bikes can not only improve our physical fitness but also reduce carbon production and protect the environment.

“physical”是形容词，“physically”是副词；原句中的“our physical physically”结构不正确。这里可以用名词短语“our physical fitness”（我们的身体健康）作“improve”的宾语。并列结构中，情态动词“can”只需放在“not only”前，后面的“but also”部分直接接并列动词“reduce”。