自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 바로 답한 점은 좋지만, “seven years ago”가 아니라 “when I was seven years old”라고 해야 합니다. “I had a bike that it was…”처럼 관계절을 중복해서 쓰지 말고 “I had a small red bike”로 간결하게 표현하세요. 과거 경험이므로 동사를 과거형으로 일관되게 사용하고, “and then low”처럼 의미가 불분명한 부분은 빼거나 명확히 설명하세요. 한강에 갔던 경험을 구체적으로 덧붙이면 답변이 더 자연스럽습니다.

示例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was about seven years old. I often rode it with my father, and we sometimes cycled along the Han River. I really enjoyed those trips because they were a fun way to spend time together.

建议: 자전거가 인기 있는 이유와 공유 자전거를 언급한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 “bikes really popular”에는 동사 “are”가 필요하고, “borrow at anywhere” 대신 “rent one anywhere”라고 표현하세요. “A side”는 “one location”처럼 바꾸고, 시간당 요금은 실제 의미에 맞게 “about eight dollars an hour”라고 간결하게 말하세요. 같은 표현인 “really”와 “so yeah”를 반복하지 말고, 문장을 완결해 답변을 마무리하세요.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, partly because of the public bike-sharing system called Ddareungi. It’s affordable and convenient, since you can pick up a bike at one station and return it to another. I think many people use it for short trips or to avoid traffic.

× I had a bike that it was really small ones a red bike.

✓ I had a bike that was really small and red.

In a relative clause, that already refers to bike and serves as the subject of was, so it should not be followed by it. Use that was, not that it was. Also, ones does not fit here because you are describing one bike.

× I always ride a bike with my father and we go we went to the Han river.

✓ I always rode a bike with my father, and we went to the Han River.

The speaker is describing a childhood routine, so the verbs should be in the past tense: rode and went. When speaking, remove the abandoned false start go and say went once.

× The Han River is the biggest river in the South Korea.

✓ The Han River is the biggest river in South Korea.

Most country names, including South Korea, do not take the definite article the. Say in South Korea, not in the South Korea.

× I think bikes really, really popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are really, really popular in my country.

The clause bikes really popular is missing a verb. Add the linking verb are between the plural subject bikes and the adjective popular.

× It's really cheap and you can borrow at anywhere so you can like borrow at the A side and then you can just like return to the other side.

✓ It's really cheap, and you can borrow a bike anywhere. You can borrow one at one station and return it at another.

Anywhere does not take the preposition at, so say borrow a bike anywhere. For a location, at one station is more appropriate than at the A side. Also, include the object one or it when referring to the bike.

× So it almost like takes like eight dollars at a hour in an hour.

✓ So it costs about eight dollars an hour.

Use an before hour because hour begins with a vowel sound. The expression for a price over a period of time is eight dollars an hour. Avoid repeating both at a hour and in an hour.