自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Répondez directement, puis ajoutez un détail si vous en êtes certain. « In my adult ages » n’est pas naturel : dites plutôt « as an adult ». Évitez de répéter votre réponse avec « So, short answer, no » et supprimez les hésitations.

示例: No, I don’t think I had a bike as a child. I got my first one as an adult, mainly because I needed a convenient way to get around.

建议: Votre réponse donne une raison pertinente, mais elle est interrompue et la dernière idée reste inachevée. Terminez en opposant clairement l’usage des vélos pour les déplacements à leur usage pour les loisirs. Évitez aussi la répétition de « very » et de « probably », et choisissez une expression naturelle comme « for recreation » plutôt que « as a recreational facility ».

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Since cars are expensive, many people use bicycles for their daily commute. They’re more commonly used for transportation than for recreation.

× I think my first bike, uh, must have been in my adult ages.

✓ I think I got my first bike when I was an adult.

Adult ages is not the natural expression for this meaning. Use when I was an adult or in adulthood to refer to the period of being an adult.

× And I would say that it's probably commonly used as a means of transport more than a recreational facility, a recreational

✓ And I would say that bikes are probably used more often as a means of transport than for recreation.

The original compares being used as a means of transport with being a recreational facility, but a bike is not a facility. Use parallel expressions to compare the two purposes: as a means of transport and for recreation.