自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid the repeated conjunction “and but.” The final phrase about not having a “bag” is unrelated and may be a mispronunciation or word choice error; use “bike” if that is what you mean. Add one relevant detail, such as how often you rode it or where you used it.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, and I really enjoyed it.

建议: State your opinion clearly, and correct “my car country” to “my country.” Explain the contrast using a natural phrase such as “because cars are more convenient,” and remove the unclear ending “to for computers.” Support your answer with a specific example, such as how people commute to work.

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many people commute by car because it is more convenient and comfortable, particularly when they have a long journey.

× I used to have a bike when I was a child and but now I don't have a bag.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child, but now I don't have a bag.

And and but are both conjunctions, and using them together here is redundant. Use but alone to show the contrast between having a bike as a child and not having one now.

× I don't think that bikes are popular in my car country. Uh, people prefer using cars since it's become more convenient and fast to for computers.

✓ I don't think that bikes are popular in my car country. Uh, people prefer using cars since it has become more convenient and faster.

The phrase more convenient compares convenience, so the coordinated adjective should also be comparative: faster, not fast. Has refers to using cars, a singular gerund phrase, so it is clearer than the contraction it's in this sentence. The words to for computers do not form a grammatical phrase; the intended meaning is unclear, so clarify or omit them.