自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: You answer the question directly and add relevant details about the bike and how you used it. To sound more natural, avoid repeating “did” and using both “but” and “though” in the same sentence. “Basket with a bill” is unclear; if you mean the bike had a small warning sound device, say “a bell.” You could also make the final detail more specific, such as where you rode or who you rode with.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, although I didn’t get it until I was about twelve. It was pink and had a little basket and a bell. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

建议: You give a clear opinion, but the repeated “really” and “the people in my country” make the answer less natural. The explanation after “so” is difficult to understand and needs clearer grammar and organization. Explain which kinds of bikes are common and give a specific reason or example. Avoid claiming that bikes are all people have unless that is accurate; you could say they are an affordable or convenient option.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. Many people use them because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. You can often see students and office workers cycling to school or work.

× I did have a bike when I was a child but I did get it a little late though probably when I was around twelve years old.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child, but I got it a little late, probably when I was around twelve years old.

Using but and though together to express the same contrast is redundant. Use one contrast word, such as but. The auxiliary did is not needed before got here unless you want to emphasize that you did get the bike.

× The people in my country can't really afford cars so bikes are all they have motor vehicles, the cycles, the businessmen, even the businessmen we used to ride bikes.

✓ People in my country can't really afford cars, so bikes are all they have as motor vehicles. Cyclists and even businesspeople ride bikes.

The original combines several ideas without clear grammatical connections, making the sentence difficult to follow. Separate the ideas into complete sentences and use a clear phrase such as as motor vehicles to connect bikes with their role. Ensure that the people who ride bikes are the subject of the second sentence.