自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use accurate vocabulary and grammar. “Winslow” appears to be an incorrect word, possibly “when I was.” Also, “bite the bicycle” is not a natural expression; use “ride a bicycle” instead. Add one specific detail about where you rode or what you enjoyed. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your reason.

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was young. I often rode it with my sister around our neighborhood because it was fun and gave us more freedom. We usually went to a nearby park at the weekend.

建议: Give a clear opinion about whether bikes are popular before adding explanations. The answer does not directly address the question and contains several grammar and word-choice problems, such as “the Bangkok have,” “transportation examples,” and “rights are personal car.” Use “In my opinion,” “public transportation,” and “ride their personal cars.” Support your opinion with a specific comparison between Bangkok and other areas of Thailand, and connect your ideas with “because” or “whereas.”

示例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in Bangkok, although they are more common in smaller towns. Bangkok has an efficient public-transportation system, including the BTS and MRT, so many people use those instead. In addition, the heavy traffic and hot weather make driving a car or taking public transport more convenient than cycling.

× I liked it to bite the bicycle with my sister.

✓ I liked riding the bicycle with my sister.

After like, a gerund can be used to describe an activity: like + verb-ing. Riding is also the correct verb for using a bicycle; bite is not appropriate in this context.

× Uh, the Bangkok have many transportation examples are BTS or MRT.

✓ Uh, Bangkok has many forms of transportation, such as the BTS and MRT.

Bangkok is a proper place name, so it does not normally take the definite article the. We also use such as to introduce examples.

× Uh, the Bangkok have many transportation examples are BTS or MRT.

✓ Uh, Bangkok has many forms of transportation, such as the BTS and MRT.

Bangkok is a singular third-person subject. Therefore, the present-tense form of have must be has, not have.

× Uh, the Bangkok have many transportation examples are BTS or MRT.

✓ Uh, Bangkok has many forms of transportation, such as the BTS and MRT.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two structures: Bangkok has many forms of transportation and examples are the BTS and MRT. Use such as to connect the examples to the main sentence clearly.

× And the people in Bangkok like to rights are personal car? I think so.

✓ People in Bangkok like to drive personal cars, I think.

Cars is plural because the sentence refers to personal vehicles in general. The singular noun car would need a determiner, such as a personal car.

× And the people in Bangkok like to rights are personal car? I think so.

✓ People in Bangkok like to drive personal cars, I think.

The original sentence incorrectly uses are between the verb like and its object. Use the structure subject + like to + verb, as in People like to drive cars.