自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本切题，也提供了学习骑车和骑车去公园的细节，但存在较多词汇和语法错误。应将“back”改为“bike/bicycle”，“in my seven years old”改为“when I was seven”，“write a back”改为“ride a bike”，并使用正确时态：过去经历应说“rode”而不是“ride”。最后一句不完整，“when I joined”应删除或补充完整。建议采用“直接回答+学习经历+具体活动”的结构，并用“After that”连接细节。

示例: Yes, I had my own bike when I was seven. My parents taught me how to ride and control it. After that, I rode it to the park almost every day, so I became quite confident on a bicycle.

建议: 回答观点明确，也给出了原因，但表达不够自然且句子结构错误。“a popular transport”应改为“a popular means of transport”或“a popular form of transportation”；“or or”需要删除；“for a shorter distance working”应改为“for commuting short distances”或“when travelling short distances”。建议补充一个具体例子，并使用“especially”或“For example”使内容更连贯。

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for commuting short distances. They are cheap, convenient and help people avoid traffic jams. For example, many students and office workers cycle to school or work every day.

× Yes, well, I have my own back in my seven years old.

✓ Yes, well, I had my own bike when I was seven years old.

谈论童年经历时，应使用过去时。将“have”改为“had”，将“am”隐含的年龄表达改为“was”。“in my seven years old”表达不正确，应说“when I was seven years old”。另外，“back”应为“bike”。

× I learnt to write a back with my parents.

✓ I learnt to ride a bike with my parents.

“bike”是可数名词单数，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”。“write”表示“写”，骑自行车应使用“ride”；“back”应为“bike”。

× I ride to the park almost every day when I joined.

✓ I rode to the park almost every day when I was young.

这句话描述过去的童年习惯，所以“ride”应改为过去式“rode”。“when I joined”意思不完整，也不符合语境；这里可以使用“when I was young”表示“当我小时候”。

× I ride to the park almost every day when I joined.

✓ I rode to the park almost every day when I was young.

“park”在这里指说话双方知道的特定地点，因此前面需要使用定冠词“the”，即“the park”。同时，整句话描述过去的经历，应使用“rode”。

× Well, I reckon it's a popular transport in my country because people can use it when they go to work or or for a shorter distance working.

✓ Well, I reckon bikes are a popular means of transport in my country because people can use them to go to work or travel shorter distances.

“bikes”是复数名词，所以应使用复数代词“them”，而不是“it”。此外，“bikes are a popular means of transport”比“it's a popular transport”更自然。

× Well, I reckon it's a popular transport in my country because people can use it when they go to work or or for a shorter distance working.

✓ Well, I reckon bikes are a popular means of transport in my country because people can use them to go to work or travel shorter distances.

“or”被重复使用了一次，应删除一个。连接两个并列动作时，可以使用“to go to work or travel shorter distances”。回答时要避免重复连词。

× Well, I reckon it's a popular transport in my country because people can use it when they go to work or or for a shorter distance working.

✓ Well, I reckon bikes are a popular means of transport in my country because people can use them to go to work or travel shorter distances.

“for a shorter distance working”结构不完整且语序错误。表达“去较近的地方”时，可以说“travel shorter distances”。同时，“use them to go...”结构能够清楚地表达使用自行车的目的。

× Well, I reckon it's a popular transport in my country because people can use it when they go to work or or for a shorter distance working.

✓ Well, I reckon bikes are a popular means of transport in my country because people can use them to go to work or travel shorter distances.

这里谈论的是不同的人骑自行车去不同的地方，因此“distance”通常使用复数“distances”。使用复数形式可以更准确地表达“较短的距离”。