自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use a clear structure: answer, reason, and brief detail. Correct the phrase “one leg” to “a bike,” and use “my mum bought for me” instead of “by my mum.” Also, say “I felt happy” because you are describing a past experience. Avoid combining too many ideas with “so”; use a linking word such as “because” or “and.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was twelve. My mum bought it for me as a birthday present, so I was really happy. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

建议: Give a definite opinion at the beginning instead of starting with “I don’t know.” Then support it with specific observations and connect your ideas logically. Use “motorbikes” and “bicycles” accurately, and replace the unclear phrase “ride the cross” with the activity you mean, such as “ride bicycles” or “drive cars.” Correct “the government do not” to “the government does not,” and avoid fillers such as “yeah” and “so yeah.”

示例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. Many people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. In addition, the government has not provided enough bicycle lanes, so cycling can be unsafe in busy cities.

× Yes, I had one leg by my mum bought me when I was twelve years old so I feel happy from this gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that my mum bought me when I was twelve years old, so I felt happy about this gift.

The phrase by my mum bought me has an incorrect word order. Use the relative clause that my mum bought me to explain which bike you mean. Also, the noun bike is needed because one leg does not express the intended meaning.

× Yes, I had one leg by my mum bought me when I was twelve years old so I feel happy from this gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that my mum bought me when I was twelve years old, so I felt happy about this gift.

The question asks about your childhood, so the feeling should be expressed in the past tense: felt, not feel. Use felt because the happiness occurred when you received the gift.

× Yes, I had one leg by my mum bought me when I was twelve years old so I feel happy from this gift.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that my mum bought me when I was twelve years old, so I felt happy about this gift.

The natural preposition after happy in this context is about, not from. We say feel happy about a gift or feel happy about receiving a gift.

× I don't know because I see many people ride the motorbikes and ride the cross so it's not popular yeah moreover the government do not support anything from the bicycle. So yeah.

✓ I don't know. I see many people riding motorbikes and motocross bikes, so bicycles are not very popular. Moreover, the government does not support bicycles.

Use motorbikes without the definite article when speaking about motorbikes in general. The is used for a specific group of motorbikes, not for a general category.

× I don't know because I see many people ride the motorbikes and ride the cross so it's not popular yeah moreover the government do not support anything from the bicycle. So yeah.

✓ I don't know. I see many people riding motorbikes and motocross bikes, so bicycles are not very popular. Moreover, the government does not support bicycles.

The subject government is singular, so the present-tense auxiliary must be does, not do. In a negative sentence, use does not support.

× I don't know because I see many people ride the motorbikes and ride the cross so it's not popular yeah moreover the government do not support anything from the bicycle. So yeah.

✓ I don't know. I see many people riding motorbikes and motocross bikes, so bicycles are not very popular. Moreover, the government does not support bicycles.

The answer discusses bicycles in general, so the plural form bicycles is more appropriate than the singular form the bicycle. The plural subject also agrees with are in bicycles are not very popular.

× I don't know because I see many people ride the motorbikes and ride the cross so it's not popular yeah moreover the government do not support anything from the bicycle. So yeah.

✓ I don't know. I see many people riding motorbikes and motocross bikes, so bicycles are not very popular. Moreover, the government does not support bicycles.

The phrase support anything from the bicycle uses the wrong preposition and sounds unnatural. When discussing government support for a form of transport, say support bicycles or support cycling.