自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use the correct past tense in “I didn’t know” and “I hadn’t learned,” and remove unnecessary phrases such as “when I was small” and “when I was still a child.” Add one specific reason or result to make the answer more developed. A natural structure would be: direct answer + reason + present situation.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I never learned how to ride one. My parents were usually worried about my safety, so they didn’t buy me a bike. I still can’t ride one today.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then support your opinion with specific examples. Use linking words such as “For example” and “In addition,” and replace unclear phrases like “have the like the bike” with natural expressions such as “ride bikes” or “use bicycles.” Avoid repeating “in my country” and use more precise vocabulary, such as “bike lanes,” “cycling paths,” and “bike-sharing services.”

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. For example, my city has many cycling paths, and a lot of people use bike-sharing services to travel short distances. They are convenient, affordable, and environmentally friendly.

× No, because when I was small when I were still a child, I don't know how I didn't know how to ride a bike and until now I haven't learned how to ride a bike yet.

✓ No, because when I was still a child, I didn't know how to ride a bike, and until now I haven't learned how to ride a bike yet.

The student is describing a past situation, so the past tense is required. Use was, not were, with the subject I, and use didn't know instead of don't know. The phrase how I didn't know is also incorrect here; the correct structure is didn't know how to ride a bike.

× No, because when I was small when I were still a child, I don't know how I didn't know how to ride a bike and until now I haven't learned how to ride a bike yet.

✓ No, because when I was still a child, I didn't know how to ride a bike, and until now I haven't learned how to ride a bike yet.

The original sentence repeats when I was and includes the incomplete and confusing phrase how I didn't know. Use one clear time clause and connect the two main ideas with and. Avoid repeating the same idea in a single clause.

× I do think bikes are popular in our country in my city there are many bike tracks for people to have the like the bike and in my country there are so many like sharing bicycles.

✓ I do think bikes are popular in my country. In my city, there are many bike tracks for people to ride bikes, and there are many shared bicycles in my country.

The original answer is a run-on sentence containing several ideas without clear punctuation or grammatical connections. Separate the first idea into a complete sentence, use commas after introductory phrases, and use the structure for people to ride bikes instead of the incorrect phrase for people to have the like the bike. Removing repeated fillers such as like also makes the sentence clearer.