自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and includes a useful comparison with your sister's bicycle. However, the opening is confusing because “Yeah, not really” contradicts the later statement that you had a bicycle. Say clearly that you had one small bicycle. Avoid repetition such as “when I was a child” and “when I was in my school.” Also, “motorbike-like things” is inaccurate in this context; use “motorbikes” or simply explain that you did not have another bicycle. Correct “bigger than my my” to “bigger than mine.” Use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details.

示例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood. My older sister also had a bicycle, but hers was bigger than mine, so I could not ride it very comfortably.

建议: You answer the question directly, but the response contains repetition and grammatical errors. “They used to be” is repeated, and “a rise in popularity of bikes, motorbikes and cars” is illogical because bikes are being compared with themselves; say that motorbikes and cars have become more popular. Use the singular subject “the popularity of bicycles is decreasing,” not “are have been decreasing.” Replace “earlier on” with the more natural “in the past,” and add a specific reason, such as longer commuting distances, traffic, or convenience. A concise contrast between the past and present would make the answer more effective.

示例: Bicycles used to be very popular in my country, especially in smaller towns. However, they are less common now because motorbikes and cars are more convenient for longer journeys. As a result, many people choose motorized transport instead of cycling.

× Actually I had a small bicycle when I was in my school.

✓ Actually, I had a small bicycle when I was at school.

The preposition at is normally used with school when referring to the general period of attending school. In my school usually refers to a particular school building or institution.

× There was no motorbike-like thing.

✓ There were no motorbike-like things.

The noun phrase motorbike-like things is plural, so the there-be structure must use were rather than was.

× There was no motorbike-like thing.

✓ There were no motorbike-like things.

Because the sentence refers to multiple things, both the noun thing and the verb were must be plural.

× My elder sister had a cycle which was a bit bigger than my my.

✓ My elder sister had a cycle which was a bit bigger than mine.

Mine is the possessive pronoun used when the noun has already been mentioned. My must be followed by a noun, whereas mine can stand alone after than.

× The popularity of normal cycles are have been decreasing gradually.

✓ The popularity of normal cycles has been decreasing gradually.

The subject is the singular noun popularity, not the plural noun cycles, so the correct auxiliary is has. Are have been is also an incorrect combination of auxiliary verbs; use has been for the present perfect continuous tense.