自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and organize your response into a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Improve grammatical accuracy: use “when I was a child,” “I was 16 years old,” “I didn’t actually buy it,” and “my mother gave it to me.” Avoid fillers such as “uh” and “umm,” and remove the contradiction between “I bought my first bike” and “I didn’t actually buy it.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got my first one when I was about 16, and my mother gave it to me as a birthday present. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends.

建议: Give a direct opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. Avoid repetition and unnatural phrases such as “every almost most of the people” and “in the road.” Use “many people,” “on the roads,” and “to travel from one place to another.” Also, “the most popular” is too absolute unless you can compare bikes with other forms of transport; “quite popular” would be more natural.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and young adults. Many people use them to travel short distances because they are affordable and help them avoid traffic. In my city, it is common to see cyclists on the roads during the morning and evening rush hours.

× Yes, I had a bike when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The subject I takes was, not were, in the past tense of the verb be. Use was with I, he, she, and it; use were with you, we, and they.

× I didn't actually bought it.

✓ I didn't actually buy it.

After the past-tense auxiliary did not, the main verb must be in its base form. Therefore, use buy, not bought.

× My mother give me this as a gift.

✓ My mother gave me this as a gift.

The sentence describes a completed event in the past, so give must be changed to its past-tense form, gave.

× Yes, bikes are the most popular in my country because I see every day in the road that every almost most of the people are using bikes to go from one place to another.

✓ Yes, bikes are the most popular in my country because I see every day on the road that almost everyone is using bikes to go from one place to another.

Use the preposition on with road when referring to activity taking place on a road. The phrase in the road is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, bikes are the most popular in my country because I see every day in the road that every almost most of the people are using bikes to go from one place to another.

✓ Yes, bikes are the most popular in my country because I see every day on the road that almost everyone is using bikes to go from one place to another.

Every, almost, and most cannot be combined in this way. Use almost everyone to mean nearly all people. Also, people who use bikes can be described with the plural verb are using.