自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly in the first sentence. The phrase “I didn't get Jane to have a bike” is unclear, and “Like the normal drive” does not express a complete idea. Use accurate past-tense forms, such as “I didn't have a bike” and “I enjoyed walking.” Add one specific reason or detail, and avoid repeating the same idea about walking.

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or played in the neighborhood. Although I sometimes wanted a bike, I was quite happy walking around with my friends.

建议: Your main idea is clear, and you make a useful comparison between cities and the countryside. However, improve the grammar and linking: say “In cities” rather than “in the city,” “people usually travel by motorbike instead,” and “they use bicycles mainly in the countryside.” Explain why bicycles are less popular in cities, such as heavy traffic, long distances, or limited cycling lanes.

示例: Bicycles are not very popular in my country, especially in large cities. Most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting through heavy traffic. However, bicycles are more common in the countryside, where the roads are quieter and people often use them for exercise or short trips.

× Like the normal drive.

✓ Unlike people who normally drive, I just enjoyed walking around the streets.

This is a sentence fragment because it does not contain a complete subject-verb structure. Use a complete clause, such as 'people who normally drive,' to express the comparison clearly.

× I just enjoy walking around the street.

✓ I just enjoyed walking around the streets.

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. 'Enjoyed' is the past form of 'enjoy.' 'Streets' is also more natural when referring generally to walking around an area.

× I usually go on foot.

✓ I usually went on foot.

The speaker is describing a regular activity in the past. Therefore, the past form 'went' should be used instead of the present form 'go.'

× Like in the city people usually travel by motorbike instead they only use bike when they in the countryside area.

✓ In cities, people usually travel by motorbike, whereas they use bicycles in the countryside.

'Instead' cannot connect these two clauses in this structure. 'Whereas' correctly introduces a contrast between traveling in cities and traveling in the countryside. A comma should also be used before 'whereas'.

× Like in the city people usually travel by motorbike instead they only use bike when they in the countryside area.

✓ In cities, people usually travel by motorbike, whereas they use bicycles when they are in the countryside.

The clause 'when they in the countryside' is missing the verb 'are.' A complete clause requires a subject and a verb: 'when they are in the countryside.'

× Like in the city people usually travel by motorbike instead they only use bike when they in the countryside area.

✓ In cities, people usually travel by motorbike, whereas they use bicycles in the countryside.

When speaking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun 'bicycles' rather than singular 'bike.' Also, 'the countryside' is the natural expression for a rural area, so 'the countryside area' is unnecessary.