自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and organize the details into two or three clear sentences. Use the correct expressions “when I was a child,” “ride a bike,” “my friends’ houses,” and “every day.” Also, use the past tense consistently: “I loved the sense of freedom.” Avoid joining several clauses with commas.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was eight, and I used to ride it to my friends’ houses almost every day. I loved the sense of freedom it gave me.

建议: Your answer is relevant and well developed, but remove the filler “UH” and use the uncountable noun “low-cost transportation.” Use the comparative form “easier to park than a car,” and consider adding a specific example or result to make your explanation more vivid. “Low-cost” should be hyphenated when it comes before a noun.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they provide low-cost transportation and give people a sense of independence. I often ride my bike to meet friends or go to the park because it’s quicker than walking and easier to park than a car. They’re especially convenient in crowded city centers.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child, my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8 and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8 and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

The singular countable noun child requires an article. Use a before child because the speaker is referring to one period of childhood in a general way.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child, my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8 and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8, and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Use a semicolon or separate the clauses into two sentences.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child, my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8 and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8, and I used to write it at my friends' houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

At is used to describe the place where an activity happens. Also, friends' shows possession because the houses belong to the friends.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child, my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8 and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8, and I used to write it with my friends houses almost every day because I love the sense of freedom.

Every day, written as two words, is an adverbial phrase meaning each day. Everyday, written as one word, is an adjective, as in everyday activities.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child, my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8 and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love the sense of freedom.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my parents bought it for me as a birthday present when I was 8, and I used to write it with my friends houses almost everyday because I love a sense of freedom.

Use a sense of freedom when referring to one general feeling. The indefinite article a is appropriate because the feeling is not a previously specified or unique sense.

× In my opinion, UH bikes are very popular because they provide low cost transportations and give people a sense of independence.

✓ In my opinion, UH bikes are very popular because they provide low-cost transportation and give people a sense of independence.

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun when referring to transport as a service or means of travel, so it should not be made plural in this sentence.

× I often ride a bike to meet friends or go to the park because it's quicker than walking and easy to park than a car.

✓ I often ride a bike to meet friends or go to the park because it's quicker than walking and easier to park than a car.

The sentence compares the bike with walking and a car, so both adjectives should use the comparative form: quicker and easier. The structure easier to park than a car expresses the comparison correctly.