自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ в целом прямой и понятный, но есть несколько грамматических и лексических ошибок. Вместо “a head bike” нужно сказать “a bike” или “a bicycle”; “I were” следует заменить на “I was”. Фразу “It was from my dad” лучше выразить естественнее: “My dad gave it to me”. Кроме того, повторение “it was” и “I really” делает ответ менее эффективным. Используйте простую структуру: прямой ответ, затем причина и короткая деталь.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me as a birthday present, and I was really happy because I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

建议: Основная идея понятна, но ответ начинается с неполного предложения: “Bikes are not very popular in my country”. Следует избегать повторения “I think I think” и использовать правильное сравнение “not as popular as in Europe”, а не “not that popular like”. Также лучше сказать “there isn’t enough space or enough cycling infrastructure” вместо “we don’t have that much space and roads for biking”. Свяжите идеи логично с помощью “however” или “because” и добавьте конкретную причину, например отсутствие безопасных велодорожек.

示例: Bikes are not as popular in my country as they are in Europe. Although many people own bikes, cycling is not very common because there are not enough safe bike lanes. As a result, most people prefer to travel by car or public transport.

× Yes, I had a head bike when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I had a head bike when I was a child.

The subject I takes was, not were, in the past tense. Use was with I, he, she, and it; use were with you, we, and they. Note that head bike has not been changed because it is a vocabulary choice rather than one of the listed grammar problems.

× Bike not so popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are not so popular in my country.

The original sentence does not contain a main verb. The verb be is required to connect the subject Bikes with the adjective popular. A complete sentence needs a subject, a verb, and the rest of the information.

× Bike not so popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are not so popular in my country.

When speaking about bikes in general, use the plural form Bikes. The plural subject also requires the plural verb are. For general statements, plural countable nouns usually do not need an article.

× It's not that popular like in Europe.

✓ It's not as popular as it is in Europe.

The structure for comparing equal qualities is not as + adjective + as. Therefore, use not as popular as, rather than not that popular like. Include it is in Europe to make the comparison grammatically complete.

× And I think in my country we don't really have that much space and roads for biking.

✓ And I think in my country we don't really have that much space and that many roads for biking.

Space is an uncountable noun, so much is correct with it. Roads is a plural countable noun, so many is required. Use that much space and that many roads to apply the appropriate quantifier to each noun.