自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and use more natural grammar and collocations. Say “when I was six” instead of “when I turned to six years old,” and “on my birthday” instead of “in my birthday.” Also, use “my dad bought me a bike,” “I didn’t ride it,” and “I couldn’t ride it” rather than “didn’t played” and “couldn’t play it.” Reduce fillers such as “uh” and add one specific detail about why you could not ride it.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was six. My dad bought it for me on my birthday, but I couldn’t ride it at first because I hadn’t learned how to balance. After taking a few lessons, I eventually learned to ride it around my neighborhood.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but “everyone” is an overgeneralization, and the reason repeats the main idea. Use a more precise expression such as “many people” and explain where or why people ride bikes. Adding a specific example, such as commuting, exercising, or avoiding traffic, would make the answer more developed and effective.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. Many people ride them to school or work because they are affordable and help them avoid traffic. Cycling is also becoming more popular as a form of exercise.

× I had a bike when I turned to, uh, six years old, uh, in my birthday, my dad bought me and I didn't, umm, played for a year because I couldn't play it.

✓ I had a bike when I turned six. On my birthday, my dad bought me a bike, and I didn't play for a year because I couldn't play it.

Use turned six, not turned to six, because the verb turn is followed directly by an age. Use on my birthday, not in my birthday, because we use on with specific days and dates.

× I had a bike when I turned to, uh, six years old, uh, in my birthday, my dad bought me and I didn't, umm, played for a year because I couldn't play it.

✓ I had a bike when I turned six. On my birthday, my dad bought me a bike, and I didn't play for a year because I couldn't play it.

The original sentence joins several ideas without clear sentence boundaries, and bought me is incomplete because the object of bought is missing. Divide the ideas into separate sentences and include a bike after bought me.

× I had a bike when I turned to, uh, six years old, uh, in my birthday, my dad bought me and I didn't, umm, played for a year because I couldn't play it.

✓ I had a bike when I turned six. On my birthday, my dad bought me a bike, and I didn't play for a year because I couldn't play it.

After the auxiliary did not, use the base form of the verb: did not play, not did not played. Modal and auxiliary verbs such as did require the main verb to remain in its base form.