自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접 답한 점과 자전거를 받은 시기를 구체적으로 말한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 “I really I was really drilled”는 의미가 불분명하며, 아마 “I was really thrilled”를 의도한 것으로 보입니다. 또한 “wrote”는 “rode”가 맞고, “I really”가 반복되어 자연스럽지 않습니다. “so” 뒤에 완전한 문장을 연결하고, 답변을 2~3개의 명확한 문장으로 정리하세요.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was seven, my parents gave me a bike for my birthday, and I was really thrilled. I rode it around my neighborhood almost every day.

建议: 자전거 공유 서비스와 사용 목적을 제시하여 답변을 뒷받침한 점은 좋습니다. 그러나 “Yes, I think so” 뒤에는 마침표나 연결어가 필요하고, “many bike sharing service”는 “many bike-sharing services”로 고쳐야 합니다. “bicers”는 “bikes” 또는 “bicycles”가 맞으며, “trips”와 “shops”가 반복되거나 잘못 사용되었습니다. “for short trips, such as going to the shops or commuting to work”처럼 정확하고 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. My city has many bike-sharing services, so people often use bicycles for short trips, such as going to the shops or commuting to work. They are convenient and environmentally friendly.

× When I was seven my parents gave me a bike as a birthday present and I really I was really drilled so I wrote

✓ When I was seven, my parents gave me a bike as a birthday present, and I was really thrilled, so I rode it.

The subject I is repeated unnecessarily, which makes the sentence structurally incorrect. Use one clear subject and organize the events with appropriate conjunctions and punctuation.

× so I wrote

✓ so I rode it

The past tense of ride is rode. Wrote is the past tense of write, so it does not express the intended meaning.

× My city has many bike sharing service.

✓ My city has many bike-sharing services.

Many must be followed by a plural countable noun. Therefore, service must be changed to services. Bike-sharing is also normally written as a compound adjective before services.