自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly by clearly stating whether you had a bike. Avoid focusing on your sister unless her bike is relevant. Use the past tense consistently: say “I had” rather than “I have,” and use the singular form “a bicycle.” Organize the answer with a clear reason or contrast, and avoid repeating words such as “umm” and “bicycles.”

示例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My older sister also had a big bicycle, and I sometimes rode with her. However, I usually took the bus to school because it was more convenient.

建议: Give a direct answer and support it with one or two specific reasons. Use the correct structure “take the bus” instead of “use by bus,” and say “go to school or work” rather than “go to school or office.” Avoid unclear phrases such as “They work” and repeated words. Use linking words such as “because” and “also” to explain that public transportation is more convenient in Japan.

示例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Japan, especially in large cities. Most people take the bus or train to school and work because public transportation is convenient and reliable. Bicycles are more common for short trips, such as going to a nearby shop.

× Yes, I have umm.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question uses the past tense, Did you have...? Therefore, the short answer should use did, not have. In this context, Yes, I did is the natural response.

× I have an an sister

✓ I have a sister

Sister is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. The correct article is a because sister begins with a consonant sound. The repeated article an should also be removed.

× she has a big bicycles

✓ She has a big bicycle

The article a must be followed by a singular noun. Therefore, bicycles should be changed to the singular form bicycle.

× I sometimes follow her bicycles and I go to school by bus.

✓ I sometimes followed her on her bicycle, and I went to school by bus.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the actions should be described in the past tense. Follow changes to followed, and go changes to went. Because the student follows a person who is riding, followed her on her bicycle is the appropriate expression.

× we usually use by bus when we go to school or office

✓ We usually go by bus when we go to school or the office.

Use by bus is not the correct verb phrase for transportation. Say go by bus or take the bus. The preposition by is correctly used in the phrase go by bus.

× when we go to school or office

✓ when we go to school or the office

School can be used without the definite article when referring to its usual purpose. Office normally needs the when referring to a particular workplace or office. The parallel phrase is school or the office.

× They work because in in Japan bus is really com bus or train is really convenient.

✓ Buses and trains are really convenient in Japan.

The original sentence contains repeated words, an incomplete expression, and an unclear relationship between the ideas. A complete sentence with a clear subject and verb is Buses and trains are really convenient in Japan.

× bus or train

✓ buses and trains

The student is making a general statement about public transportation, so plural nouns are more appropriate. Buses and trains refers to these forms of transportation in general.

× bus or train is really convenient

✓ Buses and trains are really convenient

The compound subject Buses and trains is plural, so it must be followed by the plural verb are, not is.