自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答并准确描述自行车：应将“pink bag”改为“pink bike”，将“read it”改为“ride it”。语法上，“a girl who doing sports”应改为“a girl who did sports”或更自然的“I wasn’t very sporty”；“invited me go”应改为“invited me to go”。建议使用“although”连接朋友的邀请和你较少骑车的事实，并补充一个具体原因。注意控制在3—4句，避免不自然或重复的表达。

示例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike when I was a child, but I wasn’t very sporty. Although my friends often invited me to ride it to the park, I rarely did so because I preferred doing crafts and reading at home.

建议: 开头应直接回答“Bikes aren’t very popular in my country”。注意发音或词汇准确性：将“Bexar”改为“bikes”，“electric bats”改为“electric bikes”，“back”改为“bikes”，“those transportation”改为“these forms of transport”。语法上，“people are preferred”应改为“people prefer”。建议用“because”和“therefore”清晰说明原因，并给出具体情境，例如通勤距离较远、汽车或电动车更方便。删除“If you know”等口头填充语，避免重复使用“because”。

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer electric bikes or cars because they often have long commutes to work. In addition, driving is more convenient after a long day at work, so bicycles are mainly used for exercise or short trips.

× I remember that was a pink bag.

✓ I remember it was a pink bag.

动词 remember 后面需要一个明确的主语。这里用 it 指代前面提到的物品，因此不能直接说 “that was”。

× I'm not a girl who doing sports when I was a child.

✓ I wasn't a girl who did sports when I was a child.

句子描述的是童年时期的情况，应使用过去时。主句用 wasn't，关系从句用 did。

× My friend always invited me go to the park.

✓ My friend always invited me to go to the park.

固定结构是 invite somebody to do something，表示“邀请某人做某事”。因此 invited me 后面必须加 to。

× I still seldom read it because I prefer activities just doing some handcrafts or reading.

✓ I still seldom read it because I preferred activities such as doing handicrafts or reading.

“activities just doing...”的结构不自然。列举活动时，可以使用 such as，后面接动名词 doing 和 reading，使句子结构更清晰、平行。由于前文讲的是童年经历，prefer 也可使用过去式 preferred。

× I don't think Bexar popular in my country.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

主语 bikes 是复数，所以 be 动词要用 are。原句缺少 be 动词，且主语和谓语没有正确搭配。

× People in my country are preferred electric bats or cars.

✓ People in my country prefer electric bikes or cars.

这里的主语 people 是“偏好交通工具”的执行者，应使用主动语态 prefer，而不是被动结构 are preferred。

× So back is not a good choice compared with those transportation.

✓ So bikes are not a good choice compared with those forms of transportation.

transportation 是不可数名词，不能直接用 those 修饰。可以说 those forms of transportation，表示“那些交通方式”。同时用复数 bikes 表示自行车这一类交通工具。