自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and finish your response with a clear result. Use natural phrases such as “when I was a child” instead of “at my childhood,” and say “I learned to ride a bike,” not “I learnt that bike.” Avoid repetition such as “that bike, that bicycle” and remove unnecessary words like “real actually.” Use linking words such as “however” and “so” to connect your ideas, and limit the answer to two or three complete sentences.

示例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. However, my friend had one, so I learned to ride it by borrowing it occasionally. I really enjoyed practising with my friends after school.

建议: Your main idea is clear, but avoid repeating “every category” and “every people.” Use accurate plural and verb forms, such as “people from all walks of life use bikes” and “many people own a bike or rent one.” Add one specific reason, such as affordability, convenience, or environmental benefits, and connect the supporting detail with “because” or “for example.”

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. People from all walks of life use them because they are affordable and convenient, especially in busy cities. Many people own a bike, while others rent one through bike-sharing services.

× I didn't have any bike at my childhood.

✓ I didn't have a bike during my childhood.

The preposition at is incorrect before childhood. Use during to refer to a period of time. Also, a bike is more natural than any bike in this affirmative noun phrase.

× My friends real actually had a bicycle.

✓ My friends actually had bicycles.

Real is an adjective, but it cannot modify had in this sentence. Actually is the appropriate adverb, although it is optional. Because the subject is plural and the sentence refers to more than one friend, bicycles is the more natural noun form.

× When I was a kid I learnt that bike that bicycle from my friend.

✓ When I was a kid, I learned to ride a bicycle from my friend.

The phrase learned that bike is incorrect. Use the past-tense structure learned to ride a bicycle. Learned is the past tense needed because the event happened when you were a child.

× I occasionally borrowed that bicycle then I practised for.

✓ I occasionally borrowed my friend's bicycle and practised riding it.

The original sentence is incomplete because practised for has no object or following activity. Use practised riding it to clearly express the activity. Joining the two actions with and also makes the sentence structure complete.

× Every category every people every categories of people using a bike.

✓ People from every category use bikes.

The original sentence repeats incompatible quantifiers and noun forms. Use people from every category as a clear plural subject. Bikes is also natural when speaking about bikes in general.

× Every category every people every categories of people using a bike.

✓ People from every category use bikes.

Using is a present participle and cannot function as the main verb here. Use the simple present use to describe a general fact about people in your country.

× Because bike is a common thing in my country.

✓ Because bikes are common in my country.

When talking about bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes without the definite article the. The phrase a common thing is grammatically possible, but bikes are common is more natural.

× Everybody having their own bike.

✓ Everybody has their own bike.

Everybody is grammatically singular, so it requires the singular verb has. Having cannot be the main verb without an auxiliary verb in this sentence.

× They will take a rent.

✓ They will rent one.

Take a rent is not the correct English expression. Use the verb rent, and use one to avoid repeating bike. The future form will rent is appropriate if you are describing what people may do.