自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear, direct, and well organized. You give a reason and a result, and the linking phrase “As a result” is used effectively. However, “from a parent's point of view” sounds slightly unnatural because you are talking about your parents; say “my parents thought” instead. Also, avoid the hesitation “Uh” and use more natural phrasing such as “I didn’t get the chance to learn.”

示例: Not really. My parents thought riding a bike was too risky, so I didn’t get the chance to learn when I was young. As a result, I only learned how to ride one when I was a teenager.

建议: You answer the question directly, but the response is incomplete and contains an unclear ending: “so around my.” You should finish the idea and explain why bikes are popular with a specific supporting detail. Also, “bikes” is plural, so use “they’re really popular,” and replace “healthy trend” with the more natural phrase “growing interest in healthy lifestyles.” Avoid hesitations such as “umm.”

示例: Yes, I’d say bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. This is mainly because of the growing interest in healthy lifestyles and environmental protection. In my city, for example, many people ride bicycles to exercise or avoid traffic during their daily commute.

× I would say yes, it's really popular here.

✓ I would say yes, they're really popular here.

The noun bikes is plural, so it must be replaced by the plural pronoun they, not the singular pronoun it. Make sure the pronoun agrees in number with the noun it refers to.

× I guess it's because of the healthy trend among young people especially umm, so around my.

✓ I guess it's because of the healthy trend among young people, especially among people around my age.

The original sentence is incomplete because around my does not have a noun after it, and the word so does not connect the ideas correctly. Use a complete phrase such as among people around my age, and remove unnecessary fillers such as umm when speaking.