自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本直接，但出现多次重复和停顿，影响流利度。应使用“until I graduated from college”清楚说明时间，并改正“owe money, my own money to get it back”这一表达，可以说“saved my own money to buy one”。建议用两到三句话完成回答：先直接回答，再补充原因或成年后的变化。

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I didn’t get one until I graduated from college and started working, because I wanted to save my own money to buy it.

建议: 回答观点明确，也提供了杭州这一具体背景，但语法和词汇错误较多，例如“everyone write”应为“everyone rides”，“write backs”应为“ride bikes”，“E backs”应为“e-bikes”，“to their companies”不自然，应改为“to work”。避免使用“obviously”等填充性表达，并用“because”连接原因，使答案更连贯。

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially in Hangzhou, where I work. Many people, including my colleagues, ride bicycles or e-bikes to work because they are convenient and help them avoid traffic jams.

× No, I didn't have a bike until I was, uh, until I was, until I was, until I graduated from college and, uh, got a job. So I, I owe money, my own money to get it back.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike until I graduated from college and got a job. Then, I used my own money to buy one.

“until I was”后面缺少必要的补语，句子结构不完整；同时，“I owe money, my own money to get it back”结构混乱，不能清楚表达“我用自己的钱买了一辆自行车”。可以改为“I used my own money to buy one”。回答时应避免重复，并确保每个句子都有完整、清晰的结构。

× Yes uh, obviously, umm, I live in Hangzhou city, the where I work, where I worked uh, when I commute to my com company, everyone write backs or E backs to their companies.

✓ Yes, obviously. I live in Hangzhou, where I work. When people commute to work, everyone rides bikes or e-bikes.

“the where I work”结构错误，关系副词“where”前面不能使用“the”；“when I commute to my company, everyone...”的句子连接也不清楚。可以使用“where I work”说明工作地点，并用“When people commute to work”引出关于通勤的普遍情况。

× I live in Hangzhou city, the where I work, where I worked.

✓ I live in Hangzhou, where I work.

这里描述的是目前居住和工作的情况，因此应使用一般现在时“work”，而不是过去时“worked”。描述现在的习惯、状态或事实时，要保持一般现在时的一致性。

× Everyone write backs or E backs to their companies.

✓ Everyone rides bikes or e-bikes to work.

“everyone”虽然表示很多人，但语法上属于第三人称单数，因此后面的动词要使用第三人称单数形式。应使用“rides”，不能使用“write”。此外，“ride bikes or e-bikes”是表达骑自行车或电动自行车的正确搭配。