自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có ý chính phù hợp và có lý do, nhưng mắc nhiều lỗi về từ vựng, ngữ pháp và phát âm/nhận dạng từ: “bar” nên là “bike”, “dry my own bike” nên là “ride my own bike”, “the person who are” cần sửa thành “someone who is”, và “spotty person” không phù hợp ngữ cảnh; nên dùng “sporty person”. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời bị lặp từ và diễn đạt thiếu tự nhiên. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do và một chi tiết cụ thể, chẳng hạn như bạn thường đạp xe ở đâu.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was quite sporty and enjoyed outdoor activities, so my parents allowed me to ride it around my neighborhood. I often used it to visit my friends or go to the park.

建议: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và đưa ra các mục đích sử dụng xe đạp, nhưng cần sửa nhiều lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp: “bi/Bai” nên là “bikes”, “a essential” nên là “an essential”, và “an essential thing happens in life” nên đổi thành “an important part of daily life”. Tránh lặp “used people use” và dùng cấu trúc song song: “go to the supermarket, school, or work”. “Good for your house” không đúng nghĩa; nên dùng “good for your health” hoặc “better for the environment”. Hãy thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về sự tiện lợi, sức khỏe hoặc môi trường để câu trả lời tự nhiên và thuyết phục hơn.

示例: Yes, absolutely. Bikes are very popular in Vietnam because they are a convenient and affordable way to travel. People use them to go to school, work, or the supermarket, especially in smaller cities. Cycling is also good for people’s health and helps reduce air pollution.

× I used to have a bar since I was a child because I am the person who are who are actually into outdoor activities, so my parent allowed me to dry my own by as well.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child because I was actually into outdoor activities, and my parents allowed me to ride my own bike as well.

Used to is used for a past habit, so when is more appropriate than since in this sentence. Because the sentence refers to childhood, was should be used instead of am. Also, the conjunction so is unnecessary after because; use one conjunction to show the relationship between the ideas.

× I used to have a bar since I was a child because I am the person who are who are actually into outdoor activities, so my parent allowed me to dry my own by as well.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child because I was actually into outdoor activities, and my parents allowed me to ride my own bike as well.

The relative pronoun who refers to the singular noun person, so the verb should be is, not are. In the corrected version, this repeated and incorrect structure has been simplified to make the sentence clearer.

× I used to have a bar since I was a child because I am the person who are who are actually into outdoor activities, so my parent allowed me to dry my own by as well.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child because I was actually into outdoor activities, and my parents allowed me to ride my own bike as well.

Because and so should not normally be used together to connect the same cause-and-result relationship. Use because to introduce the reason, or use so to introduce the result, but not both together.

× I am really a spotty person, I have to admit that.

✓ I am really a sporty person; I have to admit that.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma. This is a comma splice. Use a semicolon, a full stop, or a suitable conjunction to connect the clauses correctly.

× I was born and raised in Vietnam where bi is actually a essential thing happens in life every day.

✓ I was born and raised in Vietnam, where biking is actually an essential part of everyday life.

Use an before a word that begins with a vowel sound, so an essential is correct instead of a essential. The phrase an essential part of everyday life is also grammatically complete and natural.

× I was born and raised in Vietnam where bi is actually a essential thing happens in life every day.

✓ I was born and raised in Vietnam, where biking is actually an essential part of everyday life.

The phrase a essential thing happens is not grammatically structured. The sentence needs a clear subject and verb structure. Biking is an essential part of everyday life provides a complete and natural structure.

× I was born and raised in Vietnam where bi is actually a essential thing happens in life every day.

✓ I was born and raised in Vietnam, where bikes are actually an essential part of everyday life.

When referring to bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject also agrees with the plural meaning of the sentence.

× People used people use Bai to go to the supermarket or to go to school, go to work.

✓ People use bikes to go to the supermarket, school, or work.

The answer describes a general fact about current life in Vietnam, so use the present tense use. The repeated form used people use should be removed.

× People used people use Bai to go to the supermarket or to go to school, go to work.

✓ People use bikes to go to the supermarket, school, or work.

The original sentence contains a repeated verb phrase and inconsistent parallel structures. After use, list the destinations in the same form: the supermarket, school, or work.