自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and naturally by saying that you had a bike and explaining how you used it. Avoid fillers such as “uh” and “umm,” and use “rode” instead of “wrote.” Also, “cycling” or “bike riding” is more accurate than calling a bike a sport. Add one specific detail, such as where you usually rode or how you felt about it.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really enjoyed riding it. I usually rode it in the park or around my neighborhood with my friends. It was one of my favorite ways to have fun and get some exercise.

建议: Your answer has a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but it ends with an incomplete sentence: “partly because.” Finish the explanation by stating a specific reason, such as unsafe roads, a lack of bike lanes, or hot weather. Use natural capitalization and phrasing: “mainly a pastime,” not “mainly A pastime.” You could also use a linking phrase such as “This is mainly because...” to connect the final reason clearly.

示例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars or public transport, such as buses and the metro, because these options are faster and more convenient in heavy traffic. Cycling is mainly a pastime for children or for adults who exercise at weekends. This is partly because many roads are not very safe for cyclists and there are not enough dedicated bike lanes.

× And uh, I wrote that at the park, sometimes in the alley.

✓ And uh, I rode it at the park, sometimes in the alley.

The verb wrote means produced written words, but the intended meaning is that the student used the bike. The correct past-tense form of ride is rode. Be careful to distinguish irregular past-tense verbs such as ride–rode and write–wrote.

× When I was a child, I had a bike, uh, it was one of my favorite, umm, sports.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. Uh, it was one of my favorite sports.

The original sentence joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Separate the clauses with a full stop, or join them with a suitable conjunction. Also, favorite sports should not be interrupted by a filler word or unnecessary comma.

× Cycling tends to be mainly A pastime for children or for adults who ride for exercise or on weekends, partly because.

✓ Cycling tends to be mainly a pastime for children or for adults who ride for exercise or on weekends, partly because it can be less convenient in heavy traffic.

The phrase partly because introduces a dependent clause, but the original sentence does not complete that clause. Add a subject and a verb after because to express the reason clearly. In normal writing, use lowercase a after the comma.