自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use clear, accurate sentence structures. The main idea seems to be that your father bought you a bike for your birthday, but several words and phrases are unclear, such as “Where was the child,” “Boat by my father,” and “When my birthday is your birthday?” Keep the answer to two or three connected sentences and add one specific detail, such as how often you rode the bike or where you used it.

示例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike for my birthday when I was about seven years old. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

建议: Give a clear opinion and use the correct word “bikes” instead of “bags.” Improve the grammar in “We can and ride them to anywhere we want” by saying “We can ride them anywhere we want.” To develop your answer, explain why bikes are convenient and add a specific example, such as using them for commuting, exercise, or avoiding traffic.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient and inexpensive. People can ride them to work, school, or nearby shops, and they can also avoid heavy traffic. Many people use bicycles for exercise as well.

× Where was the child I had like back?

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The original sentence has an unclear and incorrect structure. Use the time expression When I was a child, followed by the subject and verb I had, to describe a past experience clearly.

× Where was the child I had like back?

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past-tense form was is needed in When I was a child. The verb had is also correctly used in the past tense.

× Boat by my father and he sent it to me.

✓ It was bought by my father, and he gave it to me.

The original sentence is missing the auxiliary verb was and does not form a complete passive construction. Use It was bought by my father to show that the bike was purchased by your father.

× Boat by my father and he sent it to me.

✓ It was bought by my father, and he gave it to me.

After was in a passive sentence, use the past participle bought, not the base form buy or an incomplete form. The structure is was plus bought.

× Boat by my father and he sent it to me.

✓ It was bought by my father, and he gave it to me.

The answer describes events that happened in childhood, so the past-tense verb gave is required instead of the present-tense form give.

× Boat by my father and he sent it to me.

✓ It was bought by my father, and he gave it to me.

The original begins with an incomplete phrase. Adding It was bought creates a complete clause with a subject, an auxiliary verb, and a main verb.

× When my birthday is your birthday?

✓ On my birthday, he gave it to me.

The answer refers to a past event, so gave is the appropriate past-tense verb. The original present-tense form is does not fit the past context.

× When my birthday is your birthday?

✓ On my birthday, he gave it to me.

Use the preposition on with a specific day or occasion, such as on my birthday. The original phrase does not use a natural preposition for this meaning.

× When my birthday is your birthday?

✓ On my birthday, he gave it to me.

Because the speaker is referring to their own birthday, use my rather than your. The pronoun me is also needed after the verb gave to identify the receiver.

× We can and ride them to anywhere we want.

✓ We can ride them anywhere we want.

After the modal verb can, use the base form of the verb directly. The extra word and is incorrect, so the correct structure is can ride.

× We can and ride them to anywhere we want.

✓ We can ride them anywhere we want.

The adverb anywhere does not require the preposition to in this sentence. Say ride them anywhere, not ride them to anywhere.