自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly with “Yes, I did” and use the correct phrase “I had a bike,” not “I had on my bike.” Also, “birthday presentation” is incorrect; say “birthday present” or “a bike for my birthday.” Your answer has a clear reason and personal reaction, but the sentence structure could be more natural and accurate.

示例: Yes, I did. My dad gave me a new bike for my birthday, and I was really excited to ride it around my neighborhood.

建议: Give a direct answer such as “Yes, I do,” then support it with a specific observation. Use “people riding bikes” instead of “people who are riding a bike,” and use the plural “bicycles” or “bikes.” The phrase “in the load Rd” is unclear; say “on the roads” or name a specific place. Avoid hesitation and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “because” or “especially.”

示例: Yes, I do. Bikes are quite popular in my country because I often see people riding them on busy roads and in public parks, especially during the evening.

× Yeah, sure, I had on my bike.

✓ Yeah, sure, I had a bike.

The preposition on is incorrect after the verb had when you mean ownership. Use had a bike to express that you owned a bike.

× This is because my dad gave me a new bike as my birthday presentation and I was so excited.

✓ This was because my dad gave me a new bike as my birthday presentation, and I was so excited.

The question asks about your childhood, so the explanation should remain in the past tense. Change is to was to keep the tense consistent with gave and was.

× There are so many bicycle in the load Rd.

✓ There are so many bicycles on the road.

After the quantifier many, use the plural noun bicycles. Also, the preposition on is used for people or vehicles being on a road. Road is the correct spelling and word here.