自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use the correct past-tense structure: “Yes, I did have,” not “I did had.” Use “from my mother,” rather than “for my mother,” and say “my twelfth birthday.” Also, “riding it” is the correct phrase, not “writing it.” Organize the response into a clear topic sentence followed by specific details, and avoid vague or repetitive phrases such as “and it was good.”

示例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child, and my mother gave it to me for my twelfth birthday. It was one of the best gifts I have ever received because I spent a lot of time riding it around my neighborhood. I still have many happy memories of those rides.

建议: Begin with a clear answer, such as “No, I don’t think they are very popular.” Use natural grammar: “bikes and bicycles are not very popular,” rather than “is not that much popular.” Explain the reason with a linking word such as “because,” and avoid repetition of “bikes,” “bicycles,” and “SUVs.” Replace informal fillers like “uh” and “and all” with precise language. You could also add a specific comparison or example to make the answer more developed.

示例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer driving large cars, especially SUVs, because they believe that bigger vehicles are safer and more impressive. As a result, bicycles are used mainly for exercise or recreation rather than daily transportation. In large cities, however, cycling is becoming slightly more common.

× Yes, I did had a bicycle when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did have a bicycle when I was a child.

When did is used to form a question or an emphatic past statement, it must be followed by the base form of the verb. Therefore, had must change to have.

× It was a gift for my mother on one of my I guess 12th birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my mother for, I guess, my 12th birthday.

The expression one of my requires a plural noun, but a person normally has only one 12th birthday. The clearer form is my 12th birthday. Also, from is used to identify the giver of a gift.

× It was a gift for my mother on one of my I guess 12th birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my mother for, I guess, my 12th birthday.

Use from to show who gave the gift and for to show the occasion. The phrase gift for my mother would mean that the mother received the gift.

× I had a lot of memories writing it and it was good.

✓ I had a lot of memories of riding it, and it was great.

The noun memories is normally followed by of and a gerund when describing an activity. Riding is the correct verb for using a bicycle; writing means producing written words.

× Well honestly no, bikes and bicycle are not that much popular in my country.

✓ Well, honestly, no. Bikes and bicycles are not very popular in my country.

Bikes is plural, so bicycle should also be plural when referring to bicycles in general. The noun should be bicycles, not bicycle.

× Well honestly no, bikes and bicycle are not that much popular in my country.

✓ Well, honestly, no. Bikes and bicycles are not very popular in my country.

Very is used naturally to modify the adjective popular. The phrase that much popular is not appropriate in this sentence.

× My country is more focused on big cars, especially SUVs cause uh, my people have the mentality the bigger the vehicle the better it is.

✓ My country is more focused on big cars, especially SUVs, because people here have the mentality that the bigger the vehicle is, the better it is.

The clause after mentality needs the conjunction that. Adding because also creates a clearer connection between the reason and the previous statement. The comparative structure should be the bigger the vehicle is, the better it is.

× So they don't care much about small vehicles such as bicycle and bikes, they prefer mostly big SUV's and all.

✓ So they do not care much about small vehicles such as bicycles and bikes. They mostly prefer big SUVs.

When referring to bicycles in general, bicycle must be plural. SUVs is also a plural abbreviation, so it does not need an apostrophe. An apostrophe is used for possession, not for ordinary plurals.

× So they don't care much about small vehicles such as bicycle and bikes, they prefer mostly big SUV's and all.

✓ So they do not care much about small vehicles such as bicycles and bikes. They mostly prefer big SUVs.

The original sentence joins two complete sentences with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Use a full stop, a semicolon, or a suitable conjunction to separate the clauses.