自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: You repeated the examiner's question instead of answering it. Give a direct response first, such as “Yes, I did” or “No, I didn’t,” and then add one or two specific details about the bicycle, how often you used it, or where you rode it. Use a past-tense verb because the question refers to your childhood.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle when I was about eight years old. I usually rode it around my neighborhood with my cousins, especially at weekends.

建议: Your answer gives a clear opinion and supporting information, but it contains several grammar, word-choice, and repetition problems. Say “Bikes are less popular than in some other countries” rather than “it’s less popular than the other countries,” and replace “get Ding into bicycles” with “are becoming interested in cycling.” Avoid repeating “transportation”; use “a means of transport” and explain one specific reason, such as affordability, health, or traffic. Also, connect your ideas more naturally with linking words such as “however,” “for example,” and “because.”

示例: I think bikes are less popular in the Philippines than in some other countries. However, cycling is becoming more popular because it is an affordable way to travel, especially for short distances. For example, many people use bicycles to avoid traffic and to stay healthy.

× I think it's less popular than the other countries but I can see a lot of Filipinos get Ding into bicycles.

✓ I think bicycles are less popular in my country than in other countries, but I can see a lot of Filipinos getting into cycling.

The comparison should be between the popularity of bicycles in my country and their popularity in other countries. Therefore, use less popular in my country than in other countries, not less popular than the other countries. The definite article is unnecessary before other countries. Also, getting into cycling is the natural expression for becoming interested in cycling.

× I think it's less popular than the other countries but I can see a lot of Filipinos get Ding into bicycles.

✓ I think bicycles are less popular in my country than in other countries, but I can see a lot of Filipinos getting into cycling.

After see + object, the -ing form can describe an action that is happening or developing. Getting into cycling means becoming interested in cycling. Get Ding is not a correct grammatical expression in this context.

× Recently they have been using it as a means of transportation and even in short travels they use it as a transportation.

✓ Recently, they have been using them as a means of transportation, and even for short trips, they use them for transportation.

Use the plural pronoun them because bicycles is plural. For short trips is the natural prepositional phrase, while in short travels is not appropriate here. Transportation is generally an uncountable noun, so do not use a before it. The phrase for transportation is more natural than as a transportation.