自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, then explain what happened. Improve grammatical accuracy by saying “an older brother,” “he liked to bully me,” “he stole my bike,” and “a couple of weeks after I got it.” Avoid repeating “bike” and use clearer linking, such as “Unfortunately” or “As a result.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn’t get to use it very often. Unfortunately, my older brother used to bully me and often took it without asking. As a result, he broke it just a couple of weeks after I got it.

建议: Use the plural form “bikes” when speaking generally, and replace unnatural phrases such as “to bike a bike” and “lean on motorbike.” Say “cycling in big cities” and “rely on motorbikes instead.” Add a specific reason or comparison to make the answer more developed and precise.

示例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Thailand, especially in large cities. The roads are often congested, and cycling can be dangerous because there aren’t enough dedicated bike lanes. Therefore, most people rely on motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting.

× I did have a bike when I was a kid but I don't really have a chance to use it much because I have older brother and he like to bully me so he just steal my bike and he broke it just like a couple week after I get it.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a kid, but I didn't really have much chance to use it because I had an older brother, and he liked to bully me, so he just stole my bike and broke it only a couple of weeks after I got it.

Because the question asks about your childhood, the past tense is more appropriate: don't have becomes didn't have, have becomes had, like becomes liked, steal becomes stole, and get becomes got. The singular countable noun brother needs the article an before it. Couple of weeks requires the plural noun weeks. The subject he also requires third-person singular verb forms, such as liked and stole.

× I don't think bike is popular amongst people in Thailand because our traffic is very crowded.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular among people in Thailand because our traffic is very crowded.

When speaking about bikes as a general category, use the plural form bikes rather than the singular countable noun bike without an article. The verb also changes from is to are because bikes is plural. Among is generally more natural than amongst in this context, although both are grammatically possible.

× To bike a bike in the big city is very dangerous, so people lean on motorbike rather than a bicycle.

✓ Riding a bike in a big city is very dangerous, so people lean on motorbikes rather than bicycles.

Riding a bike is the natural gerund phrase for describing this activity. The singular countable noun city needs the article a when referring to any big city. Motorbike and bicycle are being discussed generally, so their plural forms, motorbikes and bicycles, are more appropriate.