自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly using the past tense: “I didn’t have a bike.” Use the correct article in “when I was a child” and avoid repeating fillers such as “uh.” Also, finish the explanation clearly instead of ending with “and.” You could add a specific reason, such as being too young to ride safely.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was too young to ride one safely. I started cycling when I was about ten, and I really enjoyed it because it gave me more freedom to travel around my neighborhood.

建议: Give a clear reason and use natural, relevant vocabulary. “Alerts of people” should be “a lot of people,” and “lives blogging” is not natural here; say “making cycling videos” or “vlogging while riding.” Mention another specific reason, such as health, convenience, or avoiding traffic, and use a linking word such as “also.”

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. A lot of people use them for exercise and to avoid traffic, while others make cycling videos for YouTube. In addition, bike-sharing services have made cycling more convenient in large cities.

× No, when, uh, I was child, I don't have any bite because, uh, I was so small that I could not, uh, use it and.

✓ No, when I was a child, I don't have any bite because I was so small that I could not use it.

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a. We say a child, not was child. The final and is unnecessary because it leaves the sentence incomplete.

× No, when, uh, I was child, I don't have any bite because, uh, I was so small that I could not, uh, use it and.

✓ No, when I was a child, I didn't have any bite because I was so small that I could not use it.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Change don't have to didn't have. The modal could not is already correctly used in the past context.

× No, when, uh, I was child, I don't have any bite because, uh, I was so small that I could not, uh, use it and.

✓ No, when I was a child, I didn't have any bite because I was so small that I could not use it.

The sentence ends with and, but no additional clause follows it. Remove and to make the sentence complete. In speaking, avoid unfinished clauses by stopping after the complete idea.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, uh, there are alerts of people who are involved in blogging, umm, by using bikes and doing their, uh, lives blogging in YouTube.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because there are a lot of people who are involved in blogging by using bikes and blogging about their lives on YouTube.

The phrase a lot of people is the correct quantifier for referring to a large number of people. Use a lot of rather than alerts of in this context. Try to memorize the pattern a lot of + plural countable noun.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because, uh, there are alerts of people who are involved in blogging, umm, by using bikes and doing their, uh, lives blogging in YouTube.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because there are a lot of people who are involved in blogging by using bikes and blogging about their lives on YouTube.

The usual preposition for content published on the YouTube platform is on, not in. Also, the natural expression is blog about their lives. Practice common preposition combinations such as on YouTube and blog about something.