自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời có cấu trúc khá rõ: trả lời trực tiếp, đưa ra người tặng, người dạy đi xe và màu sắc của chiếc xe. Tuy nhiên, câu đầu bị nối bằng dấu phẩy và hơi dài; nên tách thành các câu ngắn hơn hoặc dùng từ nối như “and”. Ngoài ra, “when I was a child” bị lặp lại, “it is blue” nên đổi thành “it was blue” vì đang kể về quá khứ, và câu “It was blue” bị lặp ý. Bạn có thể bổ sung một chi tiết cụ thể về cảm xúc hoặc tần suất sử dụng xe để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

示例: Yes, I did. My grandfather bought me a blue bicycle when I was about six, and he taught me how to ride it. I was really excited when I saw it for the first time. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

建议: Bạn đã trả lời đúng chủ đề và đưa ra lý do liên quan đến việc đi lại, nhưng cách diễn đạt còn thiếu tự nhiên và một số cấu trúc chưa chính xác. “A lot of people possess a bike in the house” nên đổi thành “Many people own a bike” hoặc “Many households have one or two bikes”. Cụm “A family for people” không rõ nghĩa; có thể dùng “Some families”. “Commute in a not far distance” nên đổi thành “travel short distances”, còn “go to market” cần có mạo từ: “go to the market”. Hãy sắp xếp câu theo cấu trúc: ý kiến trực tiếp → lý do → ví dụ cụ thể, đồng thời dùng từ nối như “because” và “for example”.

示例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in Vietnam, especially for short-distance travel. Many households own one or two bikes because they are affordable and convenient. For example, people often use them to go to the market, travel to nearby shops, or commute to work.

× Yes, I did when I was a child, my grandfather bought me a bicycle and he was the person who taught me how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my grandfather bought me a bicycle, and he was the person who taught me how to ride a bike.

The original contains a comma splice: two independent clauses are joined only by a comma. Use a full stop to separate the clauses and a conjunction to connect related ideas clearly.

× I was very interested when I first saw my new bike and as I remember it is blue. It was blue.

✓ I was very interested when I first saw my new bike, and as I remember, it was blue.

The question refers to a past experience, so the description of the bicycle should also use the past tense: was, not is. The second sentence repeats the same information and can be removed.

× A family for people may possess two bikes.

✓ A family of four people may have two bikes.

Use of, not for, to describe the members of a family. Have is also more natural than possess when talking about everyday belongings.

× The Vietnamese need bikes to commute in a not far distance.

✓ Vietnamese people need bikes to commute over short distances.

The preposition in is not appropriate with distance in this sentence. Use over with distances. Short distances is also the natural expression instead of a not far distance.

× We can go to market.

✓ We can go to the market.

Market is a singular countable noun referring to a specific type of place, so it normally needs the definite article the in this sentence.