自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant, well developed, and includes specific details about the bike and your childhood activities. However, maintain consistent past tense: use “we went” instead of “we go” and “we saw fish” instead of “see fishes.” Avoid vague endings such as “that kind of thing”; replace them with one specific example. You could also use a linking phrase such as “For example” to connect your supporting detail more naturally.

示例: Yes, I had a little postman’s bike when I was a child. It was bright red, and I used to ride it around my village with my friends. For example, we often cycled to the pond and explored the surrounding countryside. I really enjoyed those adventures because they gave me a sense of freedom.

建议: You answer the question directly and provide a relevant example, but some vocabulary and phrasing need correction. Say “road racing” rather than “Rd. racing,” “Lycra clothing” rather than “latex clothing,” and “MAMILs,” meaning “middle-aged men in Lycra,” rather than “mammals.” Improve fluency by avoiding repeated “and they” and by using a clearer linking structure. For example, explain that road-racing clubs are especially popular among middle-aged people and describe what they do at weekends.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among people who enjoy outdoor activities. For example, road racing has become increasingly popular with middle-aged people, many of whom join cycling clubs. At weekends, they wear Lycra cycling clothes and ride long distances together. They are sometimes jokingly called MAMILs, which means “middle-aged men in Lycra.”

× We go to lots of places together, go on adventures, go to the pond, see fishes, that kind of thing.

✓ We went to lots of places together, went on adventures, went to the pond, and saw fish, that kind of thing.

The question asks about the student's childhood, and the surrounding verbs are in the past tense, such as had and used to ride. Therefore, go and see should be changed to their past-tense forms, went and saw. Adding and before the final item also makes the list clearer.

× We go to lots of places together, go on adventures, go to the pond, see fishes, that kind of thing.

✓ We went to lots of places together, went on adventures, went to the pond, and saw fish, that kind of thing.

Fish is normally used as the plural form when referring to multiple fish in general. Fishes is generally used when referring to different species of fish, so fish is more appropriate in this context. When describing several actions in the past, keep all the verbs in the past tense.