自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I did.” Avoid unclear phrases such as “busy in that thing” and “feel nothing.” Explain how often you rode your bike and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words such as “because” or “although,” and make sure the verb tenses remain consistent.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was a child, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. It was a fun way to spend my free time and helped me become more independent.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons. Correct the grammar by using “they help people travel” instead of “it helps to go,” and avoid repetition such as “it is it.” Complete the final idea by explaining that bikes are environmentally friendly. You could also mention who commonly rides them or where they are used.

示例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, and they also reduce traffic and air pollution. In addition, many people enjoy cycling because it is a healthy form of exercise.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about a past situation: whether you had a bike as a child. Therefore, use the past-tense auxiliary did rather than the present-tense verb have.

× When I was a child, so I was very busy in that thing.

✓ When I was a child, I was very busy with it.

The correct preposition after busy is with, not in. Also, the conjunction so is unnecessary because the sentence already has a complete structure.

× So it is very good for me when I was child.

✓ It was very good for me when I was a child.

Because you are describing a past experience, use was instead of is. The phrase when I was also requires the past-tense form was.

× So it is very good for me when I was child.

✓ It was very good for me when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a. The correct phrase is a child.

× But sometimes I may feel nothing.

✓ But sometimes I felt nothing.

The answer describes your experience during childhood, so use the past-tense verb felt instead of the modal expression may feel.

× Bikes are popular in our country because it helps to go from one place to another place.

✓ Bikes are popular in our country because they help people go from one place to another.

Bikes is plural, so it cannot refer back to it. Use the plural pronoun they. The phrase help people go is also a natural structure after help.

× Bikes are popular in our country because it helps to go from one place to another place.

✓ Bikes are popular in our country because they help people go from one place to another.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb help, not the singular verb helps. In addition, they is the appropriate plural subject pronoun.

× And it is it gives happiness to the people when riding the bike.

✓ They also give people happiness when they ride bikes.

The original sentence contains two subjects and two verbs incorrectly joined: it is it gives. Use one clear subject and verb structure. The pronoun they refers to bikes, and they ride bikes clearly expresses the intended meaning.

× So it is popular because of helping the nature and.

✓ Therefore, bikes are popular because they help nature.

Because of must normally be followed by a noun phrase, but the intended meaning is better expressed with the clause because they help nature. The preposition of is not needed in this structure.

× So it is popular because of helping the nature and.

✓ Therefore, bikes are popular because they help nature.

Nature is generally used without the definite article when referring to the natural world in general. Say help nature, not help the nature.

× And.

✓ They are also environmentally friendly.

And is only a conjunction and cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Add a subject and a verb to form a complete idea.