自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本切题，也提供了学习骑车的经历，内容比较具体。注意语法和搭配：应说“on my 12th birthday”，而不是“in my 12th birthday”；“fall off a bike”比“fall down from it”更自然；“after some time of practice”比“after a time of practicing”更准确；“riding”是骑车，不是“writing”。最后一句应使用过去时“had fun”，因为你描述的是童年经历。可以使用“at first, but eventually”增强逻辑衔接，并避免重复使用“bike”。

示例: Yes, I did. I got one on my 12th birthday, but at first I couldn’t ride it and fell off several times. After some practice, I eventually learned to ride, and I had a lot of fun cycling to school.

建议: 回答表达了过去和现在的对比，但句子不完整，且有较多语法和重复问题。应使用复数“bikes are”或“a bike is”；“a necessary means of transportation”比“the necessary kind of transportation”更自然；“cars”应使用复数；描述过去时应说“people usually rode bikes”；“more and more people are owning a car”可改为“more and more people own cars”。避免重复“But”，并补充明确结论，例如虽然汽车增加，城市骑行仍然很受欢迎。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. In the past, people often rode bikes because cars were less affordable and less common. Nowadays, more people own cars, but cycling is still popular for short trips, especially in crowded cities.

× I actually had one in my 12th birthday, and at first I couldn't even ride a bike and I fell down from it. But after a time of practicing, I finally learned to ride it and I have fun writing it to go to school.

✓ I actually had one on my 12th birthday, and at first I couldn't even ride a bike, so I fell off it. But after practicing for a while, I finally learned to ride it and had fun riding it to school.

表示“在某人的生日”通常使用介词“on”，所以应说“on my 12th birthday”，不能说“in my 12th birthday”。表示从自行车上摔下来时，通常使用短语“fall off a bike”，而不是“fall down from a bike”。

× I actually had one in my 12th birthday, and at first I couldn't even ride a bike and I fell down from it. But after a time of practicing, I finally learned to ride it and I have fun writing it to go to school.

✓ I actually had one on my 12th birthday, and at first I couldn't even ride a bike, so I fell off it. But after practicing for a while, I finally learned to ride it and had fun riding it to school.

整个回答是在讲童年时的经历，主要时态是一般过去时。因此，“I have fun”应改为“I had fun”，表示当时学会骑车后很开心。

× I actually had one in my 12th birthday, and at first I couldn't even ride a bike and I fell down from it. But after a time of practicing, I finally learned to ride it and I have fun writing it to go to school.

✓ I actually had one on my 12th birthday, and at first I couldn't even ride a bike, so I fell off it. But after practicing for a while, I finally learned to ride it and had fun riding it to school.

短语“have fun”后面通常接动名词，即“have fun doing something”。这里应使用“riding”，表示“骑车”，而“writing”表示“写作”，词义不符合语境。

× Yeah, I think bike is the necessary kind of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have car, any cars, they usually ride bike to go out. But but nowadays we have more and more people are owning a car, so.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are a necessary means of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have cars. They usually rode bikes to go out. But nowadays, more and more people own cars.

“bike”“car”在这里表示一类交通工具，应该使用复数形式“bikes”和“cars”。表达一般类别时，不能使用单数形式“bike”和“car”来泛指。

× Yeah, I think bike is the necessary kind of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have car, any cars, they usually ride bike to go out. But but nowadays we have more and more people are owning a car, so.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are a necessary means of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have cars. They usually rode bikes to go out. But nowadays, more and more people own cars.

“the necessary kind”表示“唯一必要的种类”，语义不符合这里的泛指含义。这里应使用不定冠词“a”，或者使用更自然的表达“a necessary means of transportation”。

× Yeah, I think bike is the necessary kind of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have car, any cars, they usually ride bike to go out. But but nowadays we have more and more people are owning a car, so.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are a necessary means of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have cars. They usually rode bikes to go out. But nowadays, more and more people own cars.

“especially in the past”明确表示过去的情况，所以“ride”应使用过去式“rode”。注意“ride”的过去式是不规则变化，不能写成“rided”。

× Yeah, I think bike is the necessary kind of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have car, any cars, they usually ride bike to go out. But but nowadays we have more and more people are owning a car, so.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are a necessary means of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have cars. They usually rode bikes to go out. But nowadays, more and more people own cars.

“But but”重复使用了同一个连词，应删除一个“but”。句首只需要使用一个转折连词“But”。

× Yeah, I think bike is the necessary kind of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have car, any cars, they usually ride bike to go out. But but nowadays we have more and more people are owning a car, so.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are a necessary means of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have cars. They usually rode bikes to go out. But nowadays, more and more people own cars.

原句“we have more and more people are owning a car”把两个句型混在了一起，结构不正确。可以说“more and more people own cars”，也可以说“we have more and more people who own cars”。这里使用前者更简洁自然。

× Yeah, I think bike is the necessary kind of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have car, any cars, they usually ride bike to go out. But but nowadays we have more and more people are owning a car, so.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are a necessary means of transportation, especially in the past when people didn't have cars. They usually rode bikes to go out. But nowadays, more and more people own cars.

句末单独使用“So”是不完整的句子，因为它后面没有跟完整的主语和谓语。此处“So”没有表达必要的信息，直接删除即可。如果要使用“So”，必须补充完整句子，例如“So bikes are becoming less popular.”