自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ дан прямо и содержит полезные детали: велосипед был подарком, но вы редко им пользовались из-за страха упасть. Однако есть несколько грамматических ошибок. Используйте прошедшее время consistently: “I didn’t ride it much” вместо “but I ride”, “I was afraid” вместо “I afraid” и “it always stood” или более естественное “it was usually left in the garage” вместо “it is always stood”. Также избегайте повторения идеи о том, что вы не катались и велосипед стоял в гараже. Свяжите причину и результат более естественно с помощью “because” или “so”.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I didn’t ride it very often because I was afraid of falling off. It was a gift from my parents, but it was usually left in the garage.

建议: Ответ непосредственно отвечает на вопрос и содержит причину, что соответствует хорошей базовой структуре. Исправьте согласование подлежащего и сказуемого: “bicycles are”, а не “bicycles is”. Слово “communities” здесь звучит неестественно; лучше сказать “people who commute to work” или “workers”. Кроме того, выражение “reach their work” менее естественно, чем “get to work”. Разделите длинное предложение на два или используйте связку “This is because”, чтобы ответ звучал яснее и естественнее.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among people who commute to work. They are an affordable and convenient way to travel, particularly because public transport is often overcrowded in large cities.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I ride.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I rode it.

The question refers to the student's childhood, so the past tense is required. The past form of ride is rode. The pronoun it is added to clearly refer to the bike.

× I didn't ride it much because I afraid I might fall down.

✓ I didn't ride it much because I was afraid I might fall down.

The clause because I afraid is missing the verb was. The adjective afraid must be used with the past form of be: was afraid. Use was or were before adjectives when describing a past state.

× It was a gift from my parents, but it is always stood in the garage.

✓ It was a gift from my parents, but it was always stored in the garage.

The phrase is always stood uses an incorrect passive structure. The bike was placed in the garage, so use the passive form was stored. Because the rest of the answer describes the past, was is more appropriate than is.

× I think that bicycles is very popular in my country.

✓ I think that bicycles are very popular in my country.

Bicycles is plural, so it must take the plural verb are, not the singular verb is. Remember: singular subjects use is, while plural subjects use are.