自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly at the beginning: “Yes, I did.” Avoid repetition and hesitation, and use the correct past-tense structure: “When I was a child” and “My dad bought me.” You could also add one specific detail about how or where you used the bike. Keep the response to two or three fluent sentences.

示例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bike for my birthday when I was about eight, and I was really excited about it. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

建议: Give a complete answer because the response ends abruptly. Use the plural form “bikes” and the comparative form “cheaper,” not “more cheaper.” Also, make the comparison clearer: explain whether bikes are still popular, and support your opinion with a specific reason or example. Use a linking word such as “however” or “as a result” to connect your ideas.

示例: Yes, bikes are still fairly popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. In the past, they were more common because they were an inexpensive form of transportation. However, many people now prefer cars because they are faster and more comfortable.

× When I have a uh, when I was a child, I used to, umm, I used to bike.

✓ When I was a child, I used to bike.

The phrase when I have is in the present tense, but the question asks about a past childhood experience. Use the past-tense form was. Avoid repeating the sentence after correcting yourself.

× I had a bike before, umm, my dad's bought me as a gift, uh, for my birthday and I really like it.

✓ I had a bike that my dad bought me as a birthday gift, and I really liked it.

The event happened in the past, so bought and liked should be used instead of the present-tense forms bought in the contraction dad's bought and like. The phrase that my dad bought me correctly connects the bike with the gift.

× In the past, I think bike was really popular because it was really cheap transportation.

✓ In the past, I think bikes were really popular because they were a cheap form of transportation.

Bikes refers to bicycles in general, so use the plural noun bikes and the plural verb were. The pronoun they must also agree with the plural noun. A more natural expression is a cheap form of transportation.

× However nowadays there are more cheaper cars than before.

✓ However, nowadays, cars are cheaper than before.

Do not use more together with the -er comparative form cheaper. Use either cheaper or more cheap, although cheaper is the natural choice. Commas can also help separate the introductory word and phrase.

× So many people

✓ Therefore, many people choose cars instead of bikes.

So many people is only a noun phrase and does not contain a verb, so it is not a complete sentence. Add a verb, such as choose, to express what many people do. Use therefore to show the result of the previous idea.