自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly, then describe when and how you used the bike. Correct the repeated phrase “when I was,” use the past tense consistently, and say “I rode it every day” instead of “I riding every day.” Also, replace the unclear phrase “go to school the other place” with a specific destination, such as “I rode it to school and around my neighborhood.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven years old. I rode it every day, especially when I went to school. I also used it to visit my friends in the neighborhood, so it was an important part of my childhood.

建议: Give your opinion clearly and avoid repeating “because.” Use natural phrases such as “Korea is a difficult place to cycle” and “there are many hills.” Replace “plate Rd.” and “bike Rd.” with “paved roads” and “bike lanes.” Connect your reasons with linking words such as “mainly because,” “in addition,” and “as a result,” and mention that cycling may be more popular in some flat cities.

示例: I don’t think bikes are especially popular in Korea, mainly because many areas have steep hills and heavy traffic. In addition, some roads do not have proper bike lanes, so cycling can be unsafe. However, bikes are becoming more popular in flatter cities and along rivers, where people can ride more comfortably.

× Yes, when I was when I was seven years old, I bought my first bike and I riding every day and go to school the other place.

✓ Yes, when I was seven years old, I bought my first bike. I rode it every day and went to school and other places.

The phrase when I was is repeated, and the ending of the sentence is not structurally complete. Remove the repetition and divide the response into two clear sentences.

× Yes, when I was when I was seven years old, I bought my first bike and I riding every day and go to school the other place.

✓ Yes, when I was seven years old, I bought my first bike. I rode it every day and went to school and other places.

The answer describes past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Use rode instead of I riding and went instead of go.

× I think probably not because Korea is hard place to use bike because in that place doesn't have a plate Rd. it has many hills and there is no bike Rd. so it's difficult to ride many people.

✓ I think probably not because Korea is a hard place to ride a bike. There are many hills, and there are not many bike paths, so it is difficult for many people to ride.

A singular countable noun needs an article. Use a hard place and a bike. The phrase ride a bike is also the natural article pattern for this activity.

× I think probably not because Korea is hard place to use bike because in that place doesn't have a plate Rd. it has many hills and there is no bike Rd. so it's difficult to ride many people.

✓ I think probably not because Korea is a hard place to ride a bike. There are many hills, and there are not many bike paths, so it is difficult for many people to ride.

The clause in that place doesn't have has no clear grammatical subject. Use the there are structure to state that bike paths are limited: there are not many bike paths.

× I think probably not because Korea is hard place to use bike because in that place doesn't have a plate Rd. it has many hills and there is no bike Rd. so it's difficult to ride many people.

✓ I think probably not because Korea is a hard place to ride a bike. There are many hills, and there are not many bike paths, so it is difficult for many people to ride.

The phrase difficult to ride many people incorrectly places many people after the verb. Use for to identify who experiences the difficulty: difficult for many people to ride.