自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and use the past tense consistently. The sentence is confusing because you first say you did not have a bike and then say that you had one. Also, use natural expressions such as “a pink bicycle” and avoid repeating “when I was a child.” Add one specific detail about how often you used it or where you rode it.

示例: Yes, I had a pink bicycle when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood after school. Although it was quite small, it was one of my favorite possessions.

建议: Give a complete answer with a clear topic sentence and explain why bikes are popular. Avoid stopping after “because,” and replace vague phrases such as “lots of things” and “seeing these, rich” with precise ideas. Use linking words such as “because,” “as a result,” or “in addition,” and mention traffic congestion or the low cost of cycling as specific reasons.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Bangladesh, especially in Dhaka. Since the city has heavy traffic and many crowded roads, cycling can be a convenient way to travel short distances. In addition, bikes are relatively affordable and do not require fuel, so many people choose them for transportation and exercise.

× No, I don't have my bike when I was child, but I have a bicycle when I was child that was pink colour and I love that cycle.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I had a pink bicycle, and I loved that cycle.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use didn't have instead of don't have, had instead of have, and loved instead of love. The phrase was a pink bicycle is also more natural than was pink colour.

× when I was child

✓ when I was a child

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a when referring to one child in general. Therefore, say a child, not child alone.

× Yeah, bikes are popular in our country because.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because there are many traffic problems in major cities.

Because is a subordinating conjunction and must introduce a complete dependent clause. It cannot be left alone at the end of a sentence. Add the reason after because, or remove because and make two complete sentences.

× there are more truck, bus, private cars

✓ there are many trucks, buses, and private cars

The plural subject after there are must contain plural nouns. Use trucks and buses, not truck and bus. Also, many is more suitable than more when you are describing a large number without making a specific comparison.

× And also seeing these, uh, rich.

✓ Also, seeing all these vehicles, I think that bikes are useful for many people.

The original expression does not contain a complete main clause with a subject and a finite verb. The corrected version adds the subject I and the verb think, making it a complete sentence. Avoid beginning an answer with an unfinished phrase such as seeing these.