自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答直接回应了问题，也提供了原因和频率，但句子过长且重复使用 because；“help me to help me”是明显重复；“it can help”应改为过去时“it could help”，因为你在谈论童年经历；“practiced it”不自然，应说“practiced riding it”。建议使用“观点 + 原因 + 具体细节”的结构，并控制在2—3个清晰句子内。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me because they wanted me to stay fit and learn how to ride. I practiced riding it every weekend in a park near my home.

建议: 回答包含了原因和共享单车的例子，但语法错误较多，影响清晰度。“make us to travel”应改为“help us travel”，“farther than we walked”应改为“farther than walking”，“our country had”应改为现在时“our country has”，“many had many”重复，“we can used”应改为“we can use”。此外，“convenient”重复出现。建议先明确表达“很受欢迎”，再说明便利性，并用共享单车作为具体支持细节。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They are convenient for short journeys and help people avoid traffic jams. In addition, shared-bike services are widely available, so people can easily rent a bike using a mobile app.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my parents bought it for me and wanted me to learn to ride because it can help me to help me stay healthy and make me fit.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my parents bought it for me and wanted me to learn to ride because it could help me stay healthy and make me fit.

这句话描述的是童年时期的情况，主句使用了一般过去时“had”，所以情态动词“can”应改为过去式“could”。另外，“help me to help me”是重复表达，改为“help me”更自然。

× So I practiced it every weekend.

✓ So I practiced riding it every weekend.

动词“practice”后面通常接动名词（动词-ing形式），不能直接接代词“it”来表示“练习骑车”。应使用“practice riding it”。

× Yes, because they could make us to travel farther than we walked is very convenient.

✓ Yes, because they could make us travel farther than we could on foot, which is very convenient.

使役动词“make”后面接宾语加动词原形，因此应说“make us travel”，不能说“make us to travel”。此外，“could”后面也必须接动词原形。

× Yes, because they could make us to travel farther than we walked is very convenient.

✓ Yes, because they could make us travel farther than we could on foot, which is very convenient.

“farther than we walked”比较的是“骑自行车旅行”和“走路”两个不平行的表达。应说“farther than we could on foot”，表示“比步行能走得更远”，比较对象更加清楚、平行。

× Yes, because they could make us to travel farther than we walked is very convenient.

✓ Yes, because they could make us travel farther than we could on foot, which is very convenient.

原句把原因从句和“is very convenient”直接连接在一起，句子结构不完整。可以使用关系代词“which”连接后面的评价，形成完整句子。

× It was very convenient and now our country had many had many shared bikes we can used to travel.

✓ It was very convenient, and now our country has many shared bikes that we can use to travel.

“now”表示现在的情况，所以应使用一般现在时“has”，不能使用过去式“had”。“had many”重复了一次，应删除其中一个。

× It was very convenient and now our country had many had many shared bikes we can used to travel.

✓ It was very convenient, and now our country has many shared bikes that we can use to travel.

情态动词“can”后面必须接动词原形，因此应使用“can use”，不能使用过去式或过去分词“can used”。同时，使用“that”连接“shared bikes”和后面的定语从句，句子结构更完整。