自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答基本直接，也提供了原因和用途，但时态和语法错误较多：讲童年经历时应使用过去时，如“had”“was”“wanted”；“wants to me ride”应改为“wanted me to ride”；“improve my own healthy”应改为“improve my health”；“my friend”在此处更自然地使用复数“my friends”。建议先给出清晰的主题句，再用“because”连接具体原因，控制在2—3句内，避免重复表达。

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father wanted me to ride it because he thought it would improve my health and help me play outdoors with my friends.

建议: 回答观点明确，也提到了通过网络寻找骑行伙伴以及骑行地点，内容方向较好。但“will in the internet”应改为“go online”或“use the Internet”，“who wants to bike with them”应改为“people who want to cycle with them”，“decided”应改为现在时“decide”；“bike in the mountain and park”更自然的表达是“cycle in the mountains and parks”。建议使用“for example”引出具体活动，并保持时态一致。

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China. Many people use the Internet or cycling apps to find riding partners, and they often cycle in the mountains or local parks, especially at weekends.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

问题是在谈论童年经历，应该使用一般过去时。将现在时“have”改为过去时“had”。

× When I am a child, my father wants to me ride a bike to improve my own healthy and, uh, play with my friend.

✓ When I was a child, my father wanted me to ride a bike to improve my health and play with my friend.

“When I am a child”描述过去的童年时期，应改为“When I was a child”；“wants”也应改为过去式“wanted”，以保持整句话的时态一致。

× When I am a child, my father wants to me ride a bike to improve my own healthy and, uh, play with my friend.

✓ When I was a child, my father wanted me to ride a bike to improve my health and play with my friend.

“want”后面应使用“宾语 + to do”结构，因此应说“wanted me to ride”，不能说“wanted to me ride”。建议记住结构：want + somebody + to do something。

× When I am a child, my father wants to me ride a bike to improve my own healthy and, uh, play with my friend.

✓ When I was a child, my father wanted me to ride a bike to improve my health and play with my friend.

“healthy”是形容词，表示“健康的”；这里需要一个名词，表示“健康”，所以应使用“health”。常见搭配是“improve my health”。

× In China, many people will in the internet to find out who wants to bike with them and decided to bike in the mountain and park.

✓ In China, many people go on the internet to find people who want to ride bikes with them and decide to ride in the mountains and parks.

这里描述的是中国的普遍情况，不是将来发生的事情，所以不应使用“will”。应使用一般现在时“go”和“decide”。

× In China, many people will in the internet to find out who wants to bike with them and decided to bike in the mountain and park.

✓ In China, many people go on the internet to find people who want to ride bikes with them and decide to ride in the mountains and parks.

表示“上网”时，正确搭配是“go on the internet”，不能说“go in the internet”。“on”表示通过互联网这个平台进行活动。

× In China, many people will in the internet to find out who wants to bike with them and decided to bike in the mountain and park.

✓ In China, many people go on the internet to find people who want to ride bikes with them and decide to ride in the mountains and parks.

句子描述的是经常发生或普遍存在的行为，应使用一般现在时。并列动词应保持形式一致，因此使用“go”和“decide”，而不是“will”和过去式“decided”。

× In China, many people will in the internet to find out who wants to bike with them and decided to bike in the mountain and park.

✓ In China, many people go on the internet to find people who want to ride bikes with them and decide to ride in the mountains and parks.

关系从句中的“who”指代复数名词“people”，所以动词应使用复数形式“want”，不能使用第三人称单数形式“wants”。例如：“people who want to ride bikes”。