自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly and avoid unnatural or unclear phrases such as “changed my way of thinking,” “Even I don't see what time it is,” and “all the way along.” Use consistent past tense when describing childhood habits: “there was,” not “there is.” You could explain where you rode and why you enjoyed it, using a linking word such as “because.” Also, keep the answer to three or four clear sentences and avoid fillers such as “you know.”

示例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was about ten, and I often rode around my neighborhood after school. I enjoyed it because it gave me a sense of freedom and allowed me to explore the area with my friends. Sometimes, we even rode early in the morning during the holidays.

建议: Your main idea is clear, but improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness: say “motorbikes are popular because they are cheaper than cars,” “people rely on bikes,” and “the cost is much lower.” Avoid the awkward phrase “Transport means” and use “For example” instead of “Like for example.” Present the prices clearly and finish with a specific result, such as helping people commute affordably. Use plural nouns and articles consistently: “cars,” “bikes,” and “a car.”

示例: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country, mainly because they are much cheaper than cars. Many people cannot afford to buy a car, so they rely on bikes for commuting to work and getting around town. For example, a car may cost around 2 to 3 million, whereas a motorbike might cost only 100,000 to 200,000. As a result, bikes are a more affordable and practical form of transport for many families.

× Even I don't see what time it is.

✓ Even when I did not know what time it was, I used to go out.

The response describes repeated activities in the past, so the past forms did not know and was are required instead of the present forms don't see and is.

× Even I don't see what time it is.

✓ Even when I did not know what time it was, I used to go out.

Even cannot introduce this time-related condition by itself. Use even when to mean that the activity happened despite the time being unknown.

× I used to go out even when there is late night or early in the morning.

✓ I used to go out even when it was late at night or early in the morning.

The expression there is is not used to describe a time of day in this sentence. Use it was late at night, because the sentence refers to past habits.

× I used to go out even when there is late night or early in the morning.

✓ I used to go out even when it was late at night or early in the morning.

The answer describes past habits with used to, so the verb in the time clause should also be in the past: was, not is.

× I used to go out even when there is late night or early in the morning.

✓ I used to go out even when it was late at night or early in the morning.

The natural preposition in the fixed expression is at late at night, not there is late night.

× Transport means people cannot afford cars here easily so they rely on bike and the cost of the bike is very less in comparison to car.

✓ This means that people cannot easily afford cars here, so they rely on bikes, and the cost of a bike is much lower than that of a car.

This means that creates a complete and natural clause. The original wording Transport means people is awkward, and the ideas should be connected with clear clause structure and punctuation.

× They rely on bike.

✓ They rely on bikes.

The statement refers to bikes in general, so the plural noun bikes is needed. A singular countable noun would require an article, such as a bike.

× The cost of the bike is very less in comparison to car.

✓ The cost of a bike is much lower than that of a car.

Use a bike and a car when referring to bikes and cars generally. The definite article the is used for a specific, previously identified item.

× The cost of the bike is very less in comparison to car.

✓ The cost of a bike is much lower than that of a car.

Less is not used with very in this comparison. Use the comparative adjective lower with much to show a significant difference.

× The cost of the bike is very less in comparison to car.

✓ The cost of a bike is much lower than that of a car.

The sentence compares the cost of a bike with the cost of a car, not a bike with a car. That of replaces the repeated noun phrase the cost.

× But by buying a bike would cost you around 1 to 2,00,000.

✓ Buying a bike would cost you around 1 to 2,00,000.

Buying a bike is the subject of the sentence, so by is unnecessary. The gerund phrase Buying a bike can function directly as the subject of would cost.

× So that is quite sufficient for the people to live in.

✓ So that is quite sufficient for people to live on.

When money is used to support someone, the correct preposition is live on, not live in. The phrase means that the amount is enough to support people.

× So that is quite sufficient for the people to live in.

✓ So that is quite sufficient for people to live on.

People is used generically here, so it does not need the definite article the. The people would refer to a specific group already identified.